/ Urban / Supreme Emperor System
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Michael was just an ordinary boy living in modern-day America. He grew up in an orphanage with a bleak future. One day he acquired a mysterious package only to inherit a system. Join Michael as he changes his fate and conquers his destiny; armed with a mysterious system that tries to convince him to take over the world.
This is my first novel so I would appreciate any constructive criticism and support.
This novel will also be posted on RoyalRoad.
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Idea on this novel very good.....idea about modern world and system....the MC from nerd become emperor.... i like this novel...i hope you can update this chapter everyday...and i hope too i can read this until the end of this chapter...thank you
Quite a good system story. Does what a system story should in showing clear progression, clear rules for progression, and of course most importantly, a satisfying payoff for getting that progression. Looking forward to how this develops later.
5/5 Finally not someone who gets transported to another world. A breath of fresh air if you will, although it was kind of unnerving the emotionless killing
An amazing start, I am looking forward to what comes next.. you caught me on the cliffhanger of chapter 5 :( I like posting 140 characters per post.. its amazing
"Michael pulled out his phone and checked on his favorite web novels. No updates, damn why can't these authors update every day. The best feeling in the world is definitely when there is an unexpected mass release of chapters. Hopefully, there will be some new chapters by tomorrow."(Chapter1) Instantly one of my favorite novels of all time.
This is a surprisingly enjoyable story, feels light and upbeat even there is some early killing that doesn't seem to have any impact on the mc whatsover which is a bit odd for the character painted so far. Feels great for casual reading though. And the english is not as horrible as in quite a few other orginals on this site so you can enjoy the story without being distracted by odd syntax and grammar.
Why would you listen to people like that? Im one of the readers of these novels that loves it. From beginning up until today. Every morning i wake up hoping that you have uploaded a new chapter. And im sure its not just me that does that. You story is refreshing, great, and one of the few that really makes me excited just by reading them. The only problem i had was there was so few chapter to read. So please dont listen to people like that who leaves bad comment just because they have nothing better to do. Please continue doing this novel because its a really great piece.
Why are the chapters erasing? .............................................................................................................................................................................
Its a story I would recommend, but not strongly. It has potential and will certainly be well recieved by the LitRPG groups but its pretty basic. Sure I haven't read anything identical and its an intriguing idea but it isn't fast enough to make one hooked. I read the 15 chapters and I loved it but when the updates are like they are(1 chapter everyday or two) its simply hard to hold the same interest as a large chapter everyday. I'm not saying that its a bad pace especially since I have experience writing and I know how hard it is to keep writing while life is going on. The character developement is a tad bland but this isnt a professional book. It seems like the MC was adapting way to quickly and accepting a crazy thing like it was an everyday occurrence. He acted vicious in one chapter to someone who did something nonsensical to the MC but it wasn't that made sense. The world is made to be similar to the real world and even recently(chapter 22 for me) included a real event with some large company but it seemed slightly exaggerated. Not that it is negative to point out. Overall I hope it gets more popular and gets some better pointers and the Author improves the story. Good Luck! I'll be in the shadows lurking like always!
A great start, love the novel so far just hope there will be stable releases in the future, keep up the good work! (also hope that there will still be chapters with him getting better physical stats later on)
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great writing so far. cool modern day setting. keep it up. i love system novels. cannot think enough for 140 characters jfkdkdkdkkdkdkdkdkkdkdkdkdkdkskskzisi
Well its an awesome story i just hope its not dropped and the author is just rewriting or else we, fellow readers, will have to search for him, find him and have him write mor chaps Peaceout ** author: please dont drop i really like the story
As an Indian I'm interested to see how he develops a military baSe in India fin@lly a story that mentions my birth country in a story really interested to see how it develops and 5he understanding of the author on Indian culture will depend as not all can be bribed ad per the author
I really like novels with systems. This novel is very good where the protagonist can do anything with the help of the system, and really like the protagonist to have lots of abilities and learn quickly ... I hope this novel can continue, and also if it can be released 1 - 2 chapters. thank you
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I have read a lot of SYSTEM novels....but all lacked a solid story backing....But this blew away all my expectations.....System doesn't always indulge in the MC's life....No long queue of Shitty Quests...Everything related to the system is well proportioned...The story plot,background,pace and development are excellent compared to other System type novels.. .its too unbelievable that this the author's first try... HATS OFF TO YOU KEEP GOING
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As per author request, here is my review. Overall the story progress nicely. The growth rate of MC on the slow side(strength wise), other growth such as earning and skills are in moderate range. In MC growth department, overall in an acceptable range. The only drawback is the release rate of the chapter is a bit too slow. It's to the point that I almost forget about the story plot. But I do understand if the author has some difficulty as we are all human and this is not a serious paying job for the author. Thanks for your sharing spirit. This is my review for now if you need more just let me know.
This novel is one of the most amazing things I have picked up in recent years I can can boldly say that it will become an example novel for other people to write novels on modern and system category novels One of the must read I wish the writer all the best and I hope he will be as energetic as he is now 👍👍👍
Hello it is my first time writing so i would appreciate any support and criticism. I will try to update as much as possible. Thanks for reading my novel.