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Smith Charles is an Hazardous individual who got himself entangle with a web of Misery, Confusion And survival When he took something that belongs to another world, Accidentally unleash a Timer ticking to unlock the lower realm.
He must settle the scores between the worlds or a death doomsday will threaten the Existence of the human race
Hi, guys this is my first actual story, support me it won't cost you anything and feel free to criticize so i can improve better as a writer. and also The book Cover isn't mine..
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Good job author!....The synopsis is captivating! I would recommend it to people who are looking for adventure novels. The writing quality is amazing, I like the format and the descriptions give it a feel of the movie.
You gotta love a story with a great synopsis. The synopsis in my opinion plays a great role in attracting your readers even more, and the writing quality is top-notch.
The grammar is fine and okay but could use some work. Also, the sentence structure and writing style need some work. Though that is only my bad review. The thing is, this work has a lot of potentials and I must say that the author has good story telling skills. Characters were fleshed out and not card board cut-outs. Also, it needed more features so the views would get boosted. Keep it up and you will surely find success [img=recommend]
Needs a lot of work, and by a lot, I mean a lot.... Punctuation and grammar are essential in any book, so you need to edit the chapters. Story lacks depth, and storytelling is lackluster. Conversations aren't meant to be written like that 🙄. But a plus is the fresh idea and how you use ingenious references. I'm Nigerian myself 😉. All in all, like the idea, there is much work to be done ..
The synopsis explains the storyline to be quite the interesting one. Curiosity and suspense continues to interest me, to keep me reading on what's going to occur next. Good story, you got me hooked.
This one has the sleek feel of a movie to it, you dive in and keep going deeper and deeper reading. There are some captivating revelations at the get go, and a solid character to attach yourself to. Deserves a place in your library. Keep up the good work author. 👏
It is a very nice book. I love it. Everything is so good. It will be the best for people who love adventure, thrillers, horror, and a little cruelty. There are a few punctuation mistakes but I think they are going to be edited. Updating stability was good as long as I was reading till chapter 21. But after that, the author has not updated. I loved the book. It was like a Hollywood film. So engaging, and suspenseful that I felt like I was in the novel. It gives you chances to keep guessing what will happen next. Updates and mistakes are two things that bothered me a little. But I loved the story. I mean I lived in it.
Although the sentence structure could use a bit of work, This novel did a great job of getting me hooked right from the beginning. The mc has an interesting personality and combined with the quick pace of the story, the story was very captivating
The moment I started reading this book, I was completely immersed in the story. It was as if I was watching a movie and the suspense kept me on edge. The author did a great job of keeping me hooked and eager to find out what happens next. I truly appreciate the regular updates, it shows how dedicated the author is to their work.
Really captivating synopsis! This is my kinda novel as a reader. Can't wait to read more. Try keep updating on regular basis. Keep up the good work.
Despite the grammar and punctuation lacking a bit, it is quite climactic. The story gets you wondering what will happen next and hooks you right from the start. The only advice I would give is to improve on word choice and format of storytelling.
Everything comes together so well. The descriptions, the characters, the subplots and the plot itself all come together well. A must read. From review swap
Incredible storyline, and the Maun character is excellent. I feel that alternating between the first-person point of view and third-person between paragraphs was a turn-off for me. [img=recommend][img=recommend]
I really loved your story and how it developed, it is a good plot. The character development is good and the overall story is also good, keep writing.
An intriguing story so far, feels like a movie with story written in a dialogue form and moving in a smooth pace😍😍. I love it ❤️❤️
I'll say this first your writing need some impovent,tbh I really like how this story like movie script. the story itself is good I like how mature and mystery that I'm getting from the few five chapters. the world background is kinda nice to know that there small details consider like the character and the world around them. overall my tip is that improve writing and editing cause sometimes dialogues are confusing.
Very interesting, first of all what caught my attention was the starting scene at Nigeria, since i kinda i'm from there but then as i read on i found myself engrossed and all but my little advise for the author is to do some editing in the chapter. Overall, its a nice read, ah
Fast paced - the author didn't waste any time to draw people into his world. The mystery thickens as you read along. Amazing, keep up the good work. Try to fix some of the grammar and spelling and it will be eve n more spectacular [img=recommend].
The novel is just for readers who are into mystery and thriller. But a word of advice from me to the author: Try editing the paragraphs. So it will be easy to read. Overall, it is an amazing novel. Keep up the good work author!
It felt like I was watching a movie while I was reading this, you know something is good when you get anxious wanting to find out what happens next, keep up the regular updates author! Added it to my library <3