/ Sci-fi / Silver Tamer
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ready or not?
earth a great frontier, one in which humans controlled the population with close to ten billion a war was inevitable.
although the war wasn't predicted to happen so soon.
that alone was just a small scale prediction sought out after we set our concourse to the stars but only after.
no one would have guessed it was caused by a rift that would then cause chaos, nor did even the smartest person think that mana would flood the world like some sort of virus.
nonetheless had it waited one week you would be hearing "space the final frontier!" as we would have set our sites to and most likely Concorde space a place of unknown.
at least to the current us albeit short sited we would have probably split into factions that of earth and that of space.
no, I'm not quoting it, and I am really being true it would have been great BUT!!
it did not happen as planned for a few reasons.
one reason was that most things didn't take too well with mana, greedy humans, monsters and out of this world beasts destroying life as we know it.
the second was population over one week we lost over half of the population.
third well truly this is fourth but it loops into its own hellish and selfish drama.
humans were no longer the only thing at the top of the food chain, that in itself was another thing.
which was another problem causing number four humans were no longer the only sentient race as in through the rifts and from our great unknown.
a lot came through that rift, a lot came to our galaxy, but either way, it all starts with a scientist warning one day before... maybe had we listened to that sick old man more would have lived? who knows?
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The writing quality is very poor, especially In the beginning, it gets better towards the end, but can still be hard to decipher what they are saying at times. The world building is pretty good and so are the characters. The only reason I kept reading till the end was because I found the concept interesting, especially the blessings, that was fun. The first thing that should be worked on is the writing quality, it is almost near impossible to understand what I am reading at some points and that needs to be worked on immediately. It was hard to understand what was happening when the mc and his dad first met. I still dont know why he cant be his dads son anymore. That whole part made no sense, also with the mind place with the island and ****. Still don't understand that because it was not explained properly and the writing quality didn't help. Also, the characters emotions and personality change dramatically at times. It's just a real mess to be honest. Cool concept, bad execution.
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