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Douglas died in an accident, knew God and ended up winning a system (plants vs zombies).
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to be honest story is good but It does not have potential no creativity whatsoever nor proper information 🧐🧐🧐🧐🧐🧐🧐🧐🤠🤠🤠🤠🤠😔😔😔😔😔
Well, The grammar isn't too good, The development seems bland and the writing doesn't explain much. Only read like 2~3 chapters but it was barely readable for me, which i decided wasn't worth the effort. I will give points for the PVZ idea tho
I swear author wrote this on crack my guy this shit this funny as **** but grammar is not good, but guess crack does that to you exp........
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this story is not bad but it needs to be more longer and more an idea to make the storyline much better than before and take your time in this because it has a potential to be a good story but you need more information and ideas how to make it work
No semblance of anything like grammar, 0 effort to develop any type story, it's just pure shite being written at maximum speed. A baby is allowed to sell ilegal drugs at age 2 by his legal guardian who then tries to rape him all in good fun. The story is way too forced in an attempt to produce humour.
Must say this ff had potential but needs a much-needed proofreading. Also, the fact that he could beat Midnight when he is only 2 years old is kind of ridiculous, not even mentioning that he was cuffed afterwords. To sum it up, no one seems to care that a two-year-old is behaving like an *****. __________________________________
the concept has potential, but the fact that you don't know how to write and possibly translating the final result... well... you ruin the novel a little bit too much (I read until chapter 12)
I had to turn off my mind when reading this. Well, you have poor grammar. Fine, I'll keep reading. I liked the concept, so.I thought of just going with the flow. Gave up on Chapter 3. A 6-year old drug maker and a guardian (who's supposed to be a hero) who's a drug user & pusher. Yes, I'm being biased against drug users, what of it? Unless it's drugs for medical purposes, drugs will always be on the receiving end of my hate.
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Love the story didn’t expect to be this good i recommended it to everyone that knows about PvZ Mabye add a life tree that can summon plants from other worlds Also add biomes in the garden 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
I appreciate the idea of having a plants vs zombies system. I hate the dialogue. I hate how he is adopted by midnight because he is basically blackmailed by the police.
Great story. It is creative since it has PvZ (which I think nobody has thought of talking about here) and also you introduce some humor as well as good development overall. I also like your speed at which you publish chapters since it compensates for the medium lenght chapters.
The story itself isn't band and I love the idea of a PVZ plants just rollin up bustin people into pieces and I rarely see the stone pillar used so that was nice, however the grammar used is horrendous and I feel that it takes away from the enjoyment from the story
Over all pretty good, a little rough around the edges and fast paced but agood read if your up for it Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa - to post
swear to god author wrote this high af and he was drunk painnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
I had reach chapter 41 and I think, I'm confuse... I don't get it why Douglas travel in multiverse.. If he got some mission or task, its okay. But it seems that his life didn't change from the MHA world. Which I think it's a better world than tensei slime since its modern world and family is all there. Why travel?..
Finally waited its about time 'see what I did there' waited for another pvz story debated doing one but can't wait for more chaps keep up doing the great work I know it's hard writing details for your story but just keep on going. (^_^)
It had potential but it is super rushed to get to canon or world hopping, every chapter or half chapter has at least 1 time skip of years, months or hours, to me this appears to be made in Spanish and translated to English (most likely Google, because how shit it is), names mispelled almost every chapter and not corrected, so many errors in common words (ex: villager=villain, abito=habit, Azawa=Aizawa, Lida=Iida, etc.), a MC that we don't know anything about because one chapter he is a smart as **** 2 years old and in the other a braindead 6 or 8 years old and in another chapter a 2 meters tall 14 years old that cannot contain himself of nurturing plants or anything similar to that, super shallow characters and to end the review a 'romance' and 'funny' jokes made by the Author that make this almost unreadable and enjoyable. That is just my opinion and it is my fault if i exaggerated.
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