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摘要
This is a passionate story...
"Pikachu, use Thunderbolt on all the Spearows, strike from all directions!" Ash waved his right hand vigorously.
"Pikapi?" Pikachu looked at Ash's blankly face and then looked at the dozens of Spearows that had already lost their fighting ability...
It's a story of hard work...
"Pikachu, we have to work hard, keep working hard, and finally climb to the peak that no one has ever climbed!" Ash clenched his fists and shouted full of fighting spirit!
"Pikapi?" Pikachu looked down at the foot of the mountain covered by clouds...
This is a story full of friendship!
"Misty, even if we can't travel together in the future, we are still good friends!"
"May, fuck, I believe you will be able to become the Top Coordinator!"
"Dawn, even if we can't meet again in the future, you will be one of my best friends!...
[THIS IS AN MTL]
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Hohoho... Nice nice nice... Have the power of fire, ice and wind pheonix is op of course. .. But the romance is satisfying where he and momo are future husband and wife. .. Maybe momo take a liking toward nejire and pestering the mc to take nejire as future 2nd wife to but no less.. .
its a good concept however the grammar is very lacking so I recommend using somthing like grammarly, also the way you narrate is kind of weird. You use first person (mc point of view) and third person (narrators point of view). I recommend you use more first person than third because that makes the reader feel more involved with the story. And when you write in third person dont write like you are the one who is speaking but a narrator who is in the universe and does not know about the fourth wall. For example dont say "the mc sat down" say "Lucas sat down"