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A boy enters a virtual reality game to help his family. The only problem is, nobody has ever won.
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Wow off the bat,i amell a plot, we already have a love intRest/childhood besTfriend basically trying to sell the MC to a a basic death areNa,a motHer who cares mOre about herself than her Own son(MC),and a naive MC who saCrifices himself. alright hopefully his head will clear up and he will get his revenge
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Okay I'm going to be the first one to review this. The story is good but has to be better. And it only has 20 chapters if you can write more it would be better.