/ Anime & Comics / One Piece: Zayn The Celestial Dragon
摘要
Zayn a Filipino Otaku got hit by a truck and was given 3 wishes by a ROB and got reincarnated into the one piece world 1 year before roger was executed as a celestial dragon.
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Author's note: The One piece is a masterpiece of Oda and i dont own anything in it. the pictures i also will use won't be mine so copyright to those who owns it.
This won't be a harem as the mc would only have one or two girl.
This is also a wish fulfilment story so don't expect much.
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So here is a honest review, nnot hese 5 stars ratings. Writing quality: It is really bad, so many mistakes it is so annoying, there is no sentence with no mistakes, often it are so stupid mistakes. Story development: There really isn't a story, he can enslave anybody he wants so he could enslave the whole world, end of the story. So there won't be any ffights hich are dangeours for him because he can just buy op skills/enslave the enemy. Character design: He is overpowered and seems a bit crazy with his wierd laugh, at the end of the day he is just a crazy person with power. Update stability: 12 chapter a week what he has for now is really good, 5 stars World background: I mean it is One Piece, so yeah nothing special. Fazit: The he is way to overpowered, he is already at the top of rhe world even before chapter 20. The bbad rammar is really ruining the story so I don't recommend to read it, only of you are bored.
Honestly I love opmc but here, I'm not gonna complain about the grammar cuz I'm also bad at it. For the wishes I like on what he wishes, which is system shop which he can buy anything and an unlimited points. I kinda don't like is the enslaving, which he can literally enslaved everyone in the world, the time he buys the skill that can make someone their slave, makes him for me strongest in that world. What I don't really like is where he recruit more like enslaved in a different way just without using the slave skill. I just it's not for me. One Piece fanfic for me is aside from becoming OP which mostly ff will do at the end of the story are ,adventuring ,building up relationship, becoming strong and etc. while here he can just pick anyone then make them loyalty to the max then 75x training effect like the first mate and it will make them OP, idk if the author will put a thing where if someone has a stronger mind they can't be enslave. Well that's just it, this only my review, read this ff if you like the concept of the story Btw author I really envy you for writing something, I have a tons of idea for a story but I can't just write it up or maybe I was too lazy HAHAHAHAHAHAH
OPMC fanfic!! I love this fanfic already even if i only readthe first two chapters. Hope it doesn't get dropped. MOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMOREMO
Wow, sorry but this is reaally bad, the grammer is not good, I’m not gonna complain about the wishes since that’s what some people like but overall it’s not anything new and doesn’t even compensate for the copy and paste story by being done well.
Im trying to be as humble as i can, Review: The story is rushed, The mc is too overpowered, The grammar is- not so good? And the story development is boring Overall: 2.2 (My opinion)
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Hey there! I'm more of a reader than a writer but if you would like I can edit your work for free, I'm actually curious how will this story would go. Of course if that's fine with you 😄
I don’t get it why is he presistant to be a pirate sinCe he took Im out . . . . . . . ; ;’;$;$;$;$$;;$$;$;$;$;$;$;838.!):&373).!:&38;);!38,63!:8,73$:&,7:$,&),
It's a Okay book, in my opinion though, it's too fast-paced and the mc is op too quickly, a slower pace would be good. As for the wishes, the 100x multiplier is good, but the System part just doesn't sit well with me.
Heres An 5 Stars Because Were Both Filipino [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]
Muitos bom amigo história tá muito boa parabéns vejo grande futuro nessa história 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏👏
Good work fellow Filipino, I'm just here to supports you, thanks for the effort you made on this ff. i hope it will continue up to 500 chaps.
Ну это неплохо. Типичная история Убер имбы, если автор сделает мир более проработанным как и самих персонажей будет еще лучше. Единственное чего не хотелось бы это чтобы он покорял других Ёнко или пиратов именно своим навыком. Хотелось бы увидеть как они взаимодействуют на равных
the writing quality is not good, the mc can buy whatever he wants from the system and has x100 training speed so he's incredibly op to the point where he kills im instantly and is in charge of the wg, also he wants to become a pirate, I have no words for how dumb and inconsequential that is, I mean whats he gonna do tell the gov he's in charge of to give himself a bounty and play pretend like a child?