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摘要
Somehow I was able to log in via my mobile phone, but not on my PC. Well, I am motivated again. So I will rewrite the Story with some changes and then I’ll continue the Story.
description.
Pride, an ordinary human of Earth, dies in reality and then awakens in the world of One Piece. On top of that, he is given a template and a devil fruit. How will he fare against entities like Gol D. Roger, Whitebeard, and Rocks D. Xebec?
Constructive criticism is very much appreciated.
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I don't know why everyone is raving about this fanfic. I've read 10 chapters and it's a very boring cliché fic. I didn't find anything interesting in it, the usual MC, the usual powers, the usual fruit, the usual plot, everything is ordinary. There is no humor at all, as if you are reading about a brick and not a person. Some may say that 10 chapters is not enough and it will get better, but why should I read boring content for the sake of what may or may not be. I once read reviews of a novel where a person didn’t like the novel after 100 chapters, but they wrote to him to wait and that the novel would get better by chapter 500. And about this novel, he pulls a maximum of 4 stars, and even then only because the rating in Webnovel is broken and everything below 3 is already complete trash.
Evaluation: Subpar (Not my cup of tea). WQ: A few unnoticeable gramm errors which can be improved on. A well structured type of writing which is a plus. 4/5 SD: With a slow to average pace of development, It's too long winded wherein the adventure or training arc of MC takes too long. A snail pace of story & MC progression. 3/5 CD: MC is a transmigrator but his foreknowledge & adult mentality are lacking. Lacks utilization of OPverse foreknowledge & his earth/previous life experiences. 3/5 US: Chapters are short, stability of update isn't up to speed. 3/5 WB: There's nothing to discuss here as most MCs encounters are just a repeat of Rocks/Roger history. Lacks exploration and adventuring as the plot progression is too slow. 3/5 Don't be discouraged by the reviews but take it as a challenge to do better. Kudos to author-san and well wishes! xD
Great story hope the authors doesn’t Drop 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍.Great story hope the authors doesn’t Drop 👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍.
Thanks for the translation……………………..,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,.,..,.,.,.,
This ff has huge potential and promise, I expect it to at least have 100+ chapters in the future with this start. I just hope the author doesn’t make a mistake with the system, power scaling later on and with the canon, bc if the author changed something in the canon that’s detrimental for the story for example, killing an future admiral or conquering/getting things that’s not his like the fruit of Ace and yonko territories(eh)……the mcs fruit is alr since it doesn’t change the plot a lot. Anyways, it’s a 5/5.
really surprised that i haven't read this novel till this moment everything were put where it should be a complete wounder🔥🔥🔥🔥 thanks really for this ff author 🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥
Ngl this fanfiction is pretty good to read especially when I have read through most of the other one piece fics still I'm waiting for more fight scenes honestly
Aller j’aime bien, surtout que c’est l’époque où la mer est la plus déchaînée, mais le mc compte trop sur son fruit du demons… C’est shanks, l’homme qui est devenue empereur avec du haki et une épée. Et j’ai aussi l’impression que le mc est un peureux, dit il qu’il ne veut pas se battre contre Roger et xebec pour améliorer son haki, je comprends. Mais il existe d’autre personne, l’entraînement en mode ermite ne donne rien normalement. La preuve est luffy, il est passé de recrue à empereur en 2 ans et demis.
i really liked the story when you stopped posting i thought you were dropping this story,hope you keep posting great chapters ✌️✌️✌️✌️✌️✌️✌️✌️
excellent till now (20 ch) hope author goes on with this amazing logical story without messing this up .............140 words are a huge pain
Sangat bagus bro, saya benar-benar ingin meyakinkan author seperti anda agar tidak berhenti menulis karena saya memiliki banyak harapan untuk cerita ini, teruskan dan saya akan selalu mendukung anda. Tolong jangan berhenti menulis secara tiba-tiba seperti yang lainnya karena ini memiliki begitu banyak potensi! Saya benar-benar menyukai cara anda menyajikan sebuah cerita dimana itu tidak terlalu cepat, namun cukup padat, dengan beberapa hal sebagai penambah suasana.
please do not make pride so powerfull in just 20 or so age because it will be unrealistic like before even if he has talent of shanks and gravity devil fruit it should at least take him 30 years to be as strong as shanks and don't alter the timeline too much and everything else is very nice keep up the good work ☺️☺️
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It's a great One Piece fanfiction!! I like it!!! 👍👍 I like that this story happen at Roger times, it's unique (usually it's happen at Luffy times, either MC join SHP or make their own pirates crew).. I like how MC/Pride not op from start (even if he have system/templete and strong devil fruits).. I also like his df, gravity fruits is one of the strong devil fruits.. I hope that Pride can meet Sora, Nicky and Olvia again in the future (hope that he can save ohara).. Can't wait to see next chapter.. Keep up the great job author san 😁👍👍😍😍
The author‘s shameless review here. In case of any questions regarding the story or other issues, you are welcome to comment below. Ah by the way, it will be no harem!!!!!!!!!!!!!