/ Anime & Comics / One piece system in a cultivation world.
摘要
James died and was transmigrated to a cultivation world with a one piece system, with it he can get devil fruit, weapons and more, what will he do with all of that, tune in and find out.
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寫檢討
It is written very stupidly and causes a feeling of disgust when reading (10101010100101010100101010101010010101010101010100101010101010101010101010010101010101010101010101010101001010101)
very bad writing. Author puts chapters as author notes and also put immersion breaking narrations which kill the involvement of the reader. Also the idea of onepiece system is interesting but the execution of it is very bad and boaring. Example: the Author could take some other interesting Fruit which would make the reading much interesting. Also in a cultivation world the pace the MC is developing is very slow. Also mixing of onepiece system and cultivation makes is very uninteresting. The integrations between the characters is also not executed properly to keep the readers engaged. All the chapters feels very boring , lackluster and very short. I would like to see author improve and will edit this review later if it gets better.
This is really good this has the potential to be one of the best fanfiction so this is good
It's okay, a little stale on the story telling. A lot of rambling to himself. I guess it's a pass.