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摘要
Hi, wanted to try an idea I had a while ago. This will probably be really bad at the beginning, but I may rewrite it when I get used to writing in English (yeah, English isn't my main language, same shit you've seen in many other synopsis)
Feel free to tell me whatever you think I'm doing wrong or pointing out misspelling and grammatical errors.
You all probably know this already but I don't own Skyrim, Devil May Cry or anything that you can slightly recognize from other games, novels, animes, etc.
The cover isn't mine, so if you can prove me that it's yours and you want it to be removed I'll do that.
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8評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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First, I'll say that your writing isn't bad, not great either but it has potential in my own opinion. Originally I was going to keep reading until you did the whole "dragon born is dead, wait no he's not" thing. That was honestly terrible. The way you write dialogue with names first is something I loath, and I have no idea why you're doing it. Saving Lokir without any actual action to change his fate just seemed like lazy writing as well. your attempt at humor didn't work for me either. All in all, it has potential, I'm just not into it. Also, Synopsis is for telling us about your story, the rest of what you actually wrote in place of it can go after
I just want the love interest to be selina. I just want the love interest to be selina. I just want the love interest to be selina. I just want the love interest to be selina.
Really love this book so far. I also love the fact that the OC actually FEELS like their living in Skyrim instead of playing a game… Please update more often but keep up the good work!
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Good start!............................................................................................................................................................................ ............
I don't know much about Skyrim, so I can't comment too much on the world stage, but the rest is good. The writing is good, the character design also doesn't have much to comment, as it's literally Nero, and the story development seems natural with the protagonist, without anything forced or anything like that.