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English is my 3rd language.
this story is my fan-fiction of mushoku tensei, and it's a way to improve my English since that's what I am studying, and I am in my 1st year in college, I will try to update, but the updating rate is very unstable since I have tests in the next months.
the story is about a young talented warrior who was betrayed by everyone who he considered a close trusted person.
after his death he meet with a powerful being telling him that he want to make a deal with him.
what is this deal? follow the story.
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Damn how come it has so few reviews??? it should have a lot more, seeing at the amazing work of the author, I really hope the author doesn't drop it
Kill him hahahahahahahahahahahaha, finally an interesting turn hahahahahaha. I hope you update more, I really like the story on how you develop the story. Tnx for the chapter
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love it so far, better than the original, and i like how the mc doesn't know about the future events makes it even more interesting just invested my entire power stone here, hope you don't drop it, i'll intest everyday
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I can describe in one word, a boring, lousy retelling of the original with minor changes, I stopped reading on page 15, I don’t recommend even trying, it’s not interesting and it’s poorly written
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Great story , it got base and room for improvement , but that is not all it can get better if author didn't forget his goals and keeps delivering it the way it has been an till now so , if u like original u shall also like this version of the story hopefully some of the original plots will get solved and shown to us better this time.
Love everything about the story besides the maid lusting after a 6 or 7 year old boy thats just plain creepy no matter how you look at it, even if she didnt do anything when he that age but lusting after small boy is wrong on so many levels I just dont like that part at all I cant even understand how she would find that appealing to her nature. At the same time I know theirs a lot of perverts out there but that screams pedo to me on so many levels I would not want to be with her if with her being like that I can even understand that the mc is actually older but at the same time that makes it worse because he knows how wrong it is and the fact he uses time magic that he barely practiced with to age himself to be with her just makes it worse maybe he was feeling like if he didnt do it soon someone else would so he was trying to claim her but ew it made me cringe so hard to read about her and him I would give 5 stars if it was just platonic love and not so dirty
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where are the new chapters??? weren't we suppose to get 1 on Friday and another 1 or 2 on Saturday??? please I need chapters it's soo good and please do not drop it, please it's just sooo good, it shouldn't be dropped
Hmm 3rd language? Tri-lingual? Very talented indeed. I’ve seen second languages, but I’ve never seen a 3rd.
Ugh... Like always its good. But I have feeling its gonna drop, like every other fanfic I end up liking :'v ..................................................................................
Anyone who can say that he reads web novels has read 'Mushoku tensei'. I find that M.C's character is better in this fanfic than the original. Author will make him immortal as well. I am sure many people didn't like the fact that the the M.C in the original novel died of old age and didn't even master his magic properly. Coming back to the review, except for the pocket size chapters, for some reason and the lack of chapters, this story is perfect. I don't know what is going to happen to Paul, but I hope that the author keeps him alive. Please don't drop this novel. Novels like this one generally gets dropped. Wait till you release around 30 chapters and the story starts to get on track. Many people will start reading then.