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Disclaimer- Harry Potter belongs to J.K Rowling.
Transmigration into Harry Potter world as Harry, hell yeah. There’s so much to explore in magic that other’s never did.
Dumbledrore?
Fuck him.
Canon Plot?
Fuck that too.
Voldemort?
Hmm… how to best make use of that dumb cunt who turned me into his living horcrux.
Ah… and there are a few girls in here that I always fancied so tagging them along is just a natural thing to do. Not too many. Just two or three would be best.
Now that I’m here, I’ll carve my own path for the future and if I fuck up everyone else’s life in the process. Who cares?
Average number of words in a chapter- 1500
Number of chapters I'll release every day- 2
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There are some recent reviews about this novel which criticized this novel for stupid reasons (atleast in my opinion)which have been bothering me. Those reasons are : A) character development of Mc : this is the plot point that I started dislike as I read more novels. These character development for very predictable, for me, as most of the time they done in same ways. They are 1) Inexperienced child Mc facing a lot problems with stupid decisions and misunderstandings to become an experienced(still not smart) *****.(this way is seen in most of shounen stories. So, I got bored by these plots and started to hate and avoid them.) 2)with a sad and tragic backstory of some smart guy Mc with debatable bad quality. (the chances of this way being good and well written are low.) B) Second one is about some guy complaining about how this novel's Mc learning Legilimency without any help from books or teachers and time it took this Mc was too low. Buddy what you're reading are reading is a fictional novel where 99% of times Mc are known to create miracle or make the impossible possible. My advice for above types of complainers, please only read shounen stories ( for a proper character development) for those that need character development and for those that don't want miracles done by Mc in novels, stop reading the novels and live your normal day lives( as in our normal life there will be no one that can make impossible possible). The following features are what I search for in novel : 1) start with a interesting idea. 2) unique Mc (no need for character development). 3) clever and funny character interactions. 4) most of the time fast paced novels attracts me. 5) an proper ending. This is a very quality most novels don't have in Webnovel. I wrote all this because after a long time I am reading a good fast paced harry Potter fanfiction with slightly unique Mc. Please don't discourage the author.
The main character is a complete idiot who draws so much attention to themselves acts intentionally anti social drives people away and than act as if he’s constantly lonely. WTF is the point of even considering bringing a gun in to a fantasy novel when the main character is already starting to be an over powered genius. The fact the mc doesn’t give a **** is cool but what does it amount to him beating up a few people and suddenly having a relationship with Hermione. GUNS DONT BELONG IN HARRY POTTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
At first, it was about M.C and reading this novel was really fun. Then the author added a little romance, which is necessary in a good novel. Now, it's about Hermione and only about her, but with a little politics here and there. Author over-explains everything about Hermione on every new chapter and about what Harry thinks about her every little action, like every little sneeze, every little sentence and it's very annoying. There was action in this novel in the beginning, there was adventure and exploring new magic and presenting the world in a different way. But now it's just some nonsense every chapter that I highly doubt anyone actually reads. Well I just skip most of it..
1) The writting quality is good for this platform and it is the story's saving grace, but also means it is average if this work was published in a developed platform. 2) The updates are constant and rigorous, I give props for the author commitment with his readers. 3) For whatever reason, I think the author is "milking" the story, halting the main plot progression and filiing the story with some tinkering in the Hp world, like creating a company, magical experiments and etc., the latters aren't a problem on itself, but the balance between the main plot progression and them. In suffice, if this was a paid novel and not a fanfiction I bet people would be talking about fillers and word count, things that authors do to drag the story for extend periods of time. I have no idea how things work on pa.treon. 3.1) If the tags "slow pace"; "Business management" were here I'd be less miffed about it. 3.2) For reference, HP and the sorcerer stone have little less than 77.000 words. This story still are in the first year of Hogwarts with 114 chapters (approximately 1,5k words per chapter according with author's estimation). Besides, Rowling did the world building from scratch, author have a sandbox. 4) Initially, the character development was one of the things responsible for the story's initial momentum and, ironically, author - in his notes - pointed out some inconsistencies with Rowling's original characters's profiles, but then he ended up creating some of their own. Let me explain: 4.1) Harry is a trasmigated OC, he has something that people with depression and anger issues strives for: a third view perspective of the situation, in a way for them not take things too personally and affect their mental health. The character internalized this problems so much - abuse, child endangerment - that he end up appearing as an unstable sociopath. 4.2) Hermione. I don't what's the author wants with the character. I suppose that he idolize her so much that no matter what she does against the MC and creates a circus drama, the consequences are a mere afterthought by the author with a meaninless development, in a way she'll always remain as main female character. Furthermore, the circle repeats just to stir the readers I think. That's my review up to chapter 114.
Lame 😒 The beginning is good then comes hermoine. Well hermoine is not the ‘main’ problem if you think it clearly, but its the mc for making just a stupid choice. Also hes always saying he will not forget... well if you take it literally he really will not forget the mistakes he made, but not learning from it is not the same as not forgetting.
Honestly I still really don’t know what I expected from this novel and what kind of mc the author truly wanted to create. Maybe he’s just trying to please the readers and I truly wish the best but I can finally see this novel is really not for me. I don’t even remember what made me pick up this novel but I thought it’d be a dark/cold/pragmatic Harry novel. I honestly liked the beginning but things kind of took a downward turn when Hermione was introduced. I still remember the moment something popped up in the back of my mind that I wasn’t going to be able to binge read a hundred chapters. It was when Harry hugged Hermione and got addicted to the warmth. From them I knew it was a wrap and the cool headed stable logical mc was in danger. Despite the fact that he’d known her less than a year and she was 11 years old, the mc proceeded to get dangerously attached to Hermione even though their ideals couldn’t be more conflicting. I’d originally applauded his decision to groom her into his subordinate as she truly was a gifted witch but I wonder where it went so wrong as the author seemed to heighten his emotions for her when it was obvious how dangerously stupid falling for a little girl was. He taught her and revealed to her a majority of his secrets while her loyalty was never certain. It’s like he deluded himself into thinking it was a sure thing they were going to spend their lives together. Meanwhile she’s just eleven, fickle and easily able to be turned against him. I don’t know, I blame reader’s obsession with seeing an mc with empathy, ‘human’ emotions, and showing genuine care for those close to him. Maybe it’s just a difference of preference but I disliked how irrational, delusional and emotionally invested he became when it had to do with Hermione. It sometimes felt like the author was inhabiting the mc and was very enamored with Hermione/Emma Watson. I won’t deny it, I can somewhat understand where he’s coming from as I dealt with the same challenges when writing myself but I made sure to separate myself from the mc and try not to show favoritism to a specific female character. Hermione was originally meant to be a pawn but ended up owning the mc’s very fragile heart and unstable mind. It’s disheartening honestly and a primary reason why I’m dropping this novel. I wanted a cool headed mc who got things done and wasn’t controlled by his dxck or emotions. I’m not really a fan of overly emotional protagonists so I’m just gonna get off the ride while I can after reading 35 chapters. Reading other reviews showed me things don’t really change in future chapters since the author is dead set on Hermione even though their personalities directly clash. And instead of the mc corrupting and subordinating her, she’s ended up doing his head in. He acted irrationally by revealing to her all his secrets and I doubt he’s ever going to really take back control of the relationship. It’s too much angst for a bunch of 11 year olds to be dealing with. Thus the mc and the story has just turned me off it. No hard feelings, wish the novel the best. I’m out.
In my first review I gave this novel 5 stars. Now I gave it 3. The main reason is author's blind, puppy affection to Hermione, which is shown as recidivist traitor. "Genious" businessman selling stuff for a dirt-chip price to a small community. Breaking the logic of how hard it is to make a permanent charm. Repetitive plot with Hermione's betrayal anf MC's forgiveness. Doing things without considering the effect. MC using the guilt trip card every time(let's be honest, he didn't suffer, real Harry did). All this things and many others slowly but steadily turned me away from this, in other cases good novel. That's just sad.
writing quality is superb but that is all, I have read until chapter 36 the latest chapter before I did this review. All I can say is that the story is so messed up that it is not logical anymore, since the mc transmigated to the body of Harry and he have already know of the plot why be so edgelord on all the people around him?
No proper story or content, all you did was simply take up the minor plots from the book and keep playing the emotional card, playing the injured kid while simply put the char never actually went through any ****. Thank you for royally messing up this story.
Great fanfic, The only thing I could ask is more lore creation to complete rowling work. But I totaly understand if the author don't have the time with already 2 chapter /day. Great Work.
Review(ch1-154) So far the story started as a reincarnation of an unstable ***** with psychotic tendencies rising your hopes to be a Dark Lord or at least someone really Dark in nature in the HP world but the Hermione nation attack transforme this into a drama and now is filler after filler of the MC telling how cute is Hermione... 1)If you like drama and fillers this one is your cup of tea. 2)The author have a diehard Hermione fetish. 3)The author have tendencies to change the personality of the MC and telling secrets like Horcrux and Resurrection stone to Hermione something that anyone would call foolish... Two, no one but two of the worst Dark Lords have emerged with these *information* and he told her a 11yo Hermione for a foolish crush something out of character for the MC you showed us at the beginning. I’m dropping this one
MC is reincarnate person we don't know who that is or which age he actually comes from, standing up for himself is good but then author takes a huge smelly dump on the entire series by making all the original characters appearing to be self-centered, lazy, idiotic and manipulating. Hagrid a guy who can wrestle with trolls and fight death eaters is shown as superstitious and don't want to take care of harry anymore because he can speak parsletongue from the beginning, Snape is shown as self-centered, Minerva as lazy, Dumbledore as a manipulator and many other changes for other characters. MC comes out as psychotic power hungry who uses children as lab rats to train his magic (and kills them too later redacted by author) and steals just cause he can. Wants to be a loner and shuts everyone out arrogantly and claims no one ever did nice things for him. He lives a self-fulfilling prophecy life where he is a loner and a possible end villain by behaving like arrogant young masters from xianxia
Writing quality: 2/5 There are a lot of POV shifts. Most of the time, it gets annoying and confusing, especially when the story focuses on some points of the plot and then skip the parts connecting them. Ex: chapter 70ish, where Daphe is exposed as a manipulator and Hermione let her in Harry’s base for a flimsy reason, but the author skips what happens next to mind barrier training. Then, there is too much passive voice in the story. It feels like a history lecture, even more so when the fiction references things will happen in the future, but won’t happen now. All of this past knowledge is known, but these are only the details, not what the main character knows. It feels like that. Finally, there’s the grammatical errors that crop up, like extra words, or misused words, or random capitalized words, or incorrectly conjugating verbs when they’re supposed to be in their infinitive form, etc. I think it may be more of a problem with later chapters, though. Stability of Updating: 5/5. I think it’s about 2 chapters a day, each around 11 pages at least and around 20 at most. I guess it’s 3000-6000 words. A bit too much, if you ask me. If the author slowed this down and thought through his plot and writing, the Writing Quality would increase. Story Development: 2/5 It began with some legs with Harry’s life being the focus. Harry began gaining power and training. However, the inconsistencies in the characters, along with the rambling amount of their inner dialogue, destroyed the Story Development. I think it began around Harry’s downfall to edge-lordness. Then it nosedived when Hermione was introduced. The author got fixated on developing her character alongside Harry’s, so the story ended up seeing through her eyes most of the later chapters. The plot’s stuck at his “research, learning, and training” (R.L.T.) ark because whatever the main character does to power up, he thinks he is too weak and too bad with magic. It sucks when the author himself sets up possible changes to the plot, like it’s going to go somewhere, but it reverts back to “R.L.T.” It’s like “specializing” isn’t a word in the author’s dictionary, so Harry has to max out his gains and skills one at a time. We don’t care if he gets powers since he never gets to use them in real conflicts. Harry is reactionary most of the time. His real problem is not paying attention, since that’s why stuff like a troll attacking Hermione happens or Sirius Black dying early. Speaking of Sirius dying, the author did it as an excuse since he didn’t know how to deal with the character dynamics of Harry and Sirius. Creative, for sure, but it was quickly made bland and then annoying when Harry wasn’t motivated to react. We only get p**sy sh*t, like wondering the morality of harming a little girl who wants to use you over the bigger problem, when the author already concluded before that an enemy is an enemy and a tool is a tool. He erased the memories of muggles, so why does it matter if he searches through the mind of an intruder? Character design: 1/5 Harry is too passive of a character after Hermione clings to him like the parasite she is. He’s like the cliché edgy isskai hero in Japanese manga that must secretly get stronger but never use his strength because he underestimates himself. It’s worse when he babies Hermione and that somehow worsens when more female characters get introduced. Penelope was not a welcome addition to the baggage bandwagon. I also don’t see why he shares so many of his secrets with them when he clearly knows their minds can be read because they are so weak. It doesn’t help that the author repeats himself as if to reason their thoughts and actions. No, author. The characters are not acting justified. This is a story, not an argumentative essay. We don’t care if you repeat backstories. It’s never going to justify Hermione being an emotional wreck one minute, an idiot the next, and then a studious know-it-all. We’re not even going to go to Harry
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Cringe to the highest degree. Can you really call this a fanfic when the author just uses the same MC in the HP world, Harry himself and actually make the character worse and more cringe? The whole romance plot is lame and the author manages to make Harry more into an edgelord cuck. Overall same plot of HP just done worse.
Great story. I love the story so far.it's nice to see a Harry potter fanfic that isn't copy and paste from the books and the mc development is great so far even though a cold and merciless to those unrelated to him and his enemies he seem to be protective of those he cares about(Hermione) and at least decent to those who don't have ill intentions towards him though the things before coming to Hogwarts were bad he seems to change slowly after meeting Hermione since he has met someone who is actually a nice person making him see that people can be good unlike how most people he has known have been horrible making his view about people be very cold and twisted. This looks like it has a lot of potential.
It's a very cliched full mark five star review, but I feel the story deserves it. I feel as a critic, I give out way to many 5 star reviews, but as a fan I can't help but do so for good stories. I'll place a TL;DR first and below is a much longer explanation of why this story was so good. TL;DR: This story is an amazing fanfic that the author has turned into his own story. Better than most fanfic and power fantasies, It's an arguably original story, or at least one under the author's control. First off, there are many decent and good stories, this is NOT one of them. This is an AMAZING story. As a fanfic, we the audience know certain plot points. In this same fashion the story resembles one of those do-over go back in time to change history novels. It's the whole trans mitigation thing with a few different elements. About the characters, you call tell the author's biases and interpretation of the original book. The author has strong opinions that very much correlate to mainstream opinions, or at least understandable ones. The story doesn't follow the original to the tee and that's a good thing. The author has his own take, characters are more logical and fleshed out with different motivations, and although it's placed in a Harry Potter setting, it's a wholly different story. I wish more writers in fanfic wrote like this, usurping the main character rather than having secondary roles in a fanfic. Similar stories is a pokemon adventure further exploring logical mechanisms, and an original story "The Simulacrum" on RRL. 10/10 - little bit chunnobu MC.
Someone: Why are your giving him free 5 stars if you haven’t read one chapter yet!? Me: I’m a Harry potter fan so what?😎 And for the other reason is the synopsis said all the things I want.
Super good amazing awesome cool great harry potter fanfic keep up the good work and please don't drop also I hope you don't stop when he bests Voldemort and continue the story further
As the author, I hereby use my birthright to give myself 5/5 stars. I'll also use this chance to thank everyone for reading my fanfiction and for showing so much support in the comments section. It means a lot for me to hear from you guys and gives me the added bonus of +5 Inspiration for the next few hours which allows me to write even more chapters for you. So thank you for the support and have a nice day :)