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Chisaki was reincarnated to the Naruto world. But instead of Konoha, Chisaki was reincarnated in Suna, where the land was infertile and one of the poorest among the five great countries. To make it worse, Chisaki was reincarnated before the second Shinobi world war, where all the odds are against Suna.
Fortunately for Chisaki, he soon discovered that he had the same ability as one of BNHA characters: Overhaul as a trump card to defend his life in this dog-eat-dog world.
Follow the journey of Chisaki and watch how he messed up with the whole plot of Naruto.
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tbh I had a lot of expectations for this, but my brain hurts reading this, this has a lot of xianxia vibe, like at first when the kazekage is talking about the "will of the sand"(funny😒) it's like those elders in a sect citing a poetry and student being enlightened and there is that refining chakra thing i could go on and on but i wouldn't really like to give so much spoilers even if the said fanfic/novel is trash
Pls don't drop it's a really interesting concept i doubt will ever see again. oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo
I like the premise and the story's kind of fun to read. What took me out of it was the author not considering how an adult or even an older naruto-world-aware teenager would act in the situations presented. He wants to make the MC go through character development, but he chooses to do so in a way that would work better on an actual child growing up in that situation without pre-existing knowledge of the world. Long story short, having be a reincarnator with world awareness is not conducive for the developments I'm seeing the author try to invoke in the MC. The second gripe is an extreme use of hand waving. Whenever the author wants something in the story and it doesn't make sense, the world will bend in his favor to an absurd degree to get it. His first female companion is the easiest example to cite. There's not nearly enough knowledge of the series available to pinpoint one orphan in a country on one business trip. Aside from all of that, if you're able to broaden your suspension of disbelief, it's a fun concept that has a lot of potential.
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Both the story and the character I like, but it is true that the way the story is being told is quite weak, the continuous "sarcasm", jokes or occurrence that there is in the story, such as calling the background characters "cannon fodder", among other things take me out of the immersion and really, in my opinion . Otherwise I really like the direction the story is taking, but this kind of thing takes me out of reading.
I give you a review of a person and not a bot the idea of chiasaki power in Naruto was good but why nerf it already that power if you know how to use it is good but in Naruto world it is somewhat weak besides being a beta mc
author How weird is the plot Do not you think, work on MC and over minor characters and work on the plot Romance Add Pakura or OC to make MC a little softer MC got ruthless and it looks strange to me and to others too (think) and make the nickname a little original i have no idea and make a mask like the original chisaké it will look so cool lan come on author good luck on creating fanfiction
Saya suka ceritanya bagus, tetapi untuk merubah sifat karakter-karakter asli di Naruto menurutku tidak terlalu bagus dan saya suka dengan kemampuan overahul, saya harap kemampuan ini tidak terlalu merusak cerita ini kedepannya
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Don't let the first few chapters discourage you. There might be typical cn novel lines, questionable decisions, and repetitive words in the beginning, but as it gradually goes on, you see it reduce and give a bit more focus on the actual cunning and development of the mc. It is an interesting concept in Suna too, and you dont need much knowledge of BNHA to enjoy this. By reading it all in one go, I was able to see the author's improvement with the writing quality and the decreasing amount of plot holes, indicating that the author likely also listens to productive suggestions and has a lot of potential to grow: both for this book and as a writer. Overall I found this a pleasant read. The later chapters(20-40s) were especially satisfying and I look forward to seeing which direction this goes. My only suggestions are to maybe edit the early chapters and give a bit more world building about the impact mc's choices made. Please keep up the steady pace.
There is usually at least one grammar/syntax related problem every chapter. The world background feels a bit rushed. Character design for main character is nice, others not so much. Story development is not that great. Spoilers: Konan randomly pulled from Ame to Suna with weak justifications and reasoning. Torturing Dan Kato part is unbelievable as he would never call an animal "Tsunade" even if it's that name. He would also not call his torturer hokage sama. You made an elite jonin turn into a civilian with his complete wimp mentality for torture that is...sexually alleviating?!?!? Chisaki being cruel is normal as he's just a child that wants revenge on and misplaced his hatred towards Konoha as a whole. The quirk is really badly used, as in he seems to have unlimited chakra to spread it hundreds of feet across an area. Have you even seen anyone release chakra into the environment? They get a sort of aura and it's never extending too far away from the body before dissipating or circulating back into the body. He has more chakra than Naruto and 8 gates Guy from how far his chakra can be spread without dissipating. Tsunade would not trust a young kid in a desert in a random cave. During the war, look at her interactions with the Ame orphans. Especially not after being betrayed by her most beloved. I could go on, but you get my point
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Author you had me by Chisaki was reincarnated to the Naruto world. But instead of Konoha, Chisaki was reincarnated in Suna, You How sick I have gotten of Konoha for bloody fanfic I don't care if bad That fact that you decided not to in Konoha shows me you are the kind of author that likes to think outside of the box.
Pretty good concept, was a bit bored with all the fanfic where mc reincarnated in konoha. Hope he would be able to change suna's fate here [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
great story the way how the mc is reincarnated into sand village with the powers of overhaul. Also the first fanfiction i red about mc being reincarnated in the sand village great story. also when is the next update author!!!
WARNING I HAVEN'T FINISHED READING THE FANFIC YET I really don't like all these blushing faces....... better it not be a harem story..... if it's romance then it should be Konan no more- although I hate romance so much. the story is still so good! and I can't just leave it cause it's romance(maybe I'll do that if it's an average novel/fan-fic but not if it's...well... better than average? well, that doesn't applicate to harem fanfics/novels, cause I will not even bother reading the synopsis after seeing its tag...uhm "I'm the fated villain, ATG and the servant is a demon king " are an exception tho ). and Konan is one of my fav characters so far so i guess it's ok? evaluation:4.4 only for the updating stability (there are some plot holes but they are not something to worry abt )
Like the concept the MC have the same power of Overhaul, i just don't like how the MC way of thinking (just my opinion) but the progress and the plot are interesting
Till the end of the war I would have had no problems with this story and would recommend others to read it but how tsunade was recruited just was too unrealistic. not remembering the mc when they meet earlier that day I can overlook (on account of her grief) but having zero suspicion in the following time after when he’s doing exactly what she thinks Dan did (the thing she should be most paranoid of after such an event) is too much to ignore
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MC does not develop at all, but after the death of his father he becomes a complete psychopath. There are a lot of holes dug in the piece. I quit
It could have been good. But it is wasted due to author inserting his own wish fulfilment in every chapter. It's as if he is checking tick boxes of clichés at the start Waifu- check Systems check OP ability- check For a guy who spent five years in Suna, it sure looks like he just transmigrated into the 5 year Chiaki and started comparing everything to Konoha. How can a child of less than 5, convince his Jounin father to travel to Ame(basically foreign country), bring back an orphan(Konan) to Suna and convince him to unofficially adopt her? This was just to give a waifu.
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