This story has a lot of potential more than a lot of fanfic's I've seen. I think that the story would be better if you went more in depth with the character backstory. The spelling quality also needs to be worked on the most, write in lower case letter's and work on spelling. It got hard to understand words at times because the spelling was off. Other than those the story is great this is exactly what I was looking for a mega op mc although you could explain his form and how he looks.
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This story has a lot of potential more than a lot of fanfic's I've seen. I think that the story would be better if you went more in depth with the character backstory. The spelling quality also needs to be worked on the most, write in lower case letter's and work on spelling. It got hard to understand words at times because the spelling was off. Other than those the story is great this is exactly what I was looking for a mega op mc although you could explain his form and how he looks.