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the story could have been good and interesting, unfortunately it is not at all, it has no depth or development, the mc is a power machine given by the system, it could have been good, yes, it has not had more development, the pokemon harem does not matter, it does not bother, only if It was well done, it's a shame that it could have been a good novel like High School DxD: Scattered of Cherry Blossoms SixthSense1029 but the author shows that he is not interested in his news, it is a great pity
This is a bit of a crack fic but if you just want something to pass the time its ok[img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
what happen with king of denial...why you delete the story and change something else
what's the name your other account...?cause i don't know your other account....
It really could have been a good fanfic, unfortunately I lost track of all the time skips. I'm a harem fan, but I didn't understand anything here. Also, the plot itself was pretty thin. Author, if you decide to do a re-write feel free to tag me. I understand that the beginning is hard for everyone, but I wish you good luck for the future. Ps. maybe you should re-read your chapters before you post them, because mistakes like he/she could easily be avoided.
Somehow.. On the journey from chapter one to chapter three... my priorities changed, I saw things differently. I became a New Man... Story is a bit wishy washy, even with a system... HEY! (Yes I know it's a fanfic) But this seems more like a wish fulfillment self insert story.. Wait.. is this a self insert? (checks story) Doesn't say... whatever, doesn't matter. Point is: you can be the strongest dude (also kinda cringy) and get all the girls.. but that's just not that interesting though, get's really stale reading the 100th story with the same plot. I find character interaction to be lacking, kind a feels like talking with AI.. no that's an insult to AIs.. Honestly though.. cool concepts sometimes. Interesting powers... sorta. The grammar is... I could understand it mostly... Yea.. this is one of those stories where things are going to happen because author wants it to happen... Not a literary masterpiece but something dumb and mostly fun... I give it a solid snake out of water... and two beans.
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Look I get the grammatical errors but the fact that you didn't even inform yourself on the characters of the dxd world is stupid because you know to write a fanfiction you need to know the original story 🙄
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Story is developing in a good direction. Please update chapters more frequently.
Muy buena la historia me gusta como es sigue así no vallas a dejarla abandonada la mayoría de la historia dxd la dejan abandonada sería bueno que estuviera con serafall y su romance sea lento etc
new and very interesting plot i like it very much[img=recommend][img=recommend]
This is so bad it’s ridiculous. An honest power fantasy with a 1 dimensional mc. There’ is a Pokémon harem with no build up. The mc powers up everyone in his harem to nonsensical levels. Summons women from other world to increase the Pokémon harem. So much wrong and so little good. The story has no depth so I couldn’t get into it. The sheer cliche nature of this fic killed it. no buildup or training or fight scenes just instant jumps in the story.