/ Fantasy / Moral System of Harem King!
摘要
What is destiny, you may ask? Well, destiny is an automated program I've created, randomly assigned to the baby born from Mother's and Father's DNA. But sometimes, to enjoy myself, I change the destiny of suppose to be hotshot characters and make their life miserable. I did it, and my Karma got soooo negative, I had to fix it somehow. 'Who am I?' you are asking. I am the one, yes, that one.
Now that I changed the destiny of a supposed to be a successful man, Desmond, I had to give him another chance at life. To null my negative Karma, I gave him some extras, such as a system and stuff. I don't know, it is too complicated. Anyway, I will watch this boy once again, because he always brings surprises. Wanna watch it with me? Bring your own beer, and pay with power stones.
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Came for the fap, stayed for the comedy. I laughed in every chapter God! The jokes are natural and the smut are well designed and not forced. I hope you don't waste such a good novel. Also, some development please.
Loving the story, Fast paced, non-idiot mc, good snu snu, Plot is good so far and its got a good balance of skin slapping and plot. Looking forward to more from the author.
I got informed my last review got hidden or some shit(without being deleted) so I'll try it again. "I just can't force myself to read this anymore. At first, I was fine with it and normally it doesn't bother me, but the two sisters are just an issue I can't bring myself to get over. I don't care that they aren't virgins, rather that they went into heat and did such things, which means they tried to mate aka make kids with some random men, I managed to get over that, but then I found out that the wolf girl who is the same age is a virgin, so the excuse for the girl's actions just became invalidated and I can only see them as sluts, if the goblin dicks weren't described I'd have doubts about whether they slept with goblins behind the MCs back. I tried to force myself these past so many days, but I just can't anymore."
Sup, i promised to write a review to your novel as soon as i am up to date. I decided to give you some pointers on what I think you are good and Bad at so you may increase the general quality of your novel. Take it with a grain of salt, since I am no expert myself and these are just some of my obversations. And also let my say I enjoyed your Novel so far and I wouldn't bother to write this review if i didn't. Good: - The writing quality is mostly good. Here and there I rarely see some wrong pronouns, but thats it. - The Story is interesting so far, but i can't really say much more to it since we are still at the beginning. I like the heroes' journey model and if you keep it that way i will continue to like it. - The Worldbuilding is also interesting. There isn't much to it yet, since we gradually progress with our understanding of the world with the understanding the MC has. But there are lot of uncertainties with potential. - Man of culture Bad: - The Wifes lack individuality. It's cool that there is art and also the different races and such, but I know more about the personalities of some sidecharacters then i know about the wifes. - Hardships that the character has to overcome is often essential to make it interesting. Your story is a little bit fast pasted and you are missing some opportunities to make it more interesting and give the characters more depth because of that.
This story is gooooood. If you like lemon with a mix of action, cultivatation, and systems, this is something for you. And allow sometimes the grammer is wrong, it makes up for ir with the story and uniqe powers. Have to say i love this story
I hope more people should read this novel. In my opinion this is a good story. Worth the time reading this book. The story is a little bit of fast phase but simple and straightforward. You can easily pass your time reading this book. Author please be patience, this book will eventually get its popularity. Just wait for more readers to read. Just release the characters in a regular interval.
It'a good novel over all.MC is not brain death.Made me laugh in few time...It's a good r-18 novel.I will recommended it to other RESEARCHER who is looking for research materials.😉
Extraordinary, respected writer, I am waiting for the continuation of the story 👍👍👍👍🙏🙏🙏🙏👍👍👍👍👍👍🙏👍👍👍👍🙏👍👍👍🙏🙏👍👍🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏👍👍👍👍👍👍🙏👍👍🙏🙏🙏👍🙏🙏🙏👍👍👍👍
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La trama general va bien, buenos prospectos para la historia, aunque al inicio empezó un poco cojo con algunas partes confusas en la trama y escenario aunque el autor lo menciona después no está de más si luego quiere editar los primeros capítulos, me gustaría que las mujeres del harem tengan un valor real como sugerencia y ejje un poco más detalle en la escenas :v, pero buena historia sigue con los caps 👍🏻
Not much character development until now but like how the story start progressing to unravel the plot with insights here and there about the world in which he went to..😋
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I like this story so far the only real complaint I have about this story is the *** scenes are a little bit too short and not detailed enough other than that I can't wait to find out what happened next
this book has potential, the direction it goes us good, progression speed is good too, really good grammar, but character development is not shown much, the info about the world and its power system isn't really clear, and i personally don't like how he goes for one night stands, it just doesn't feel right
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Good story with nice lemon scenes. No terrible things to break immersion or any significant bad stuff. Give it a try. The only cons I perceived are: the system with abilities that seems to be forgotten. The ' partners' that seems to dissappear or never mentioned. The time skips that rushed the pacing. The fights when they mentioned experience or gains no longer appeared. It also needs a lil bit of proofreading. Nevertheless, the pros outweigh anything and you can not deny the effort the author made (planning, discord with images, reader interactions, etc.) So author :
Such a good story but why the rate is 4.6 that is the reason why im come here to keep the balance (make this story with high rating) and make this story surpass the 4.6
Guess who? Yea, it is me. Why am I giving myself 5-stars? Because it is the maximum amount I can. I know right, 10-stars should be minimum for this masterpiece. Right!