/ Teen / Mary's Little Lamb
摘要
Mary lives in a traditional western American house with cowboys and a farm house she has a special ability granted by God the ability to discern illnesses and treat them even her lamb has a special ability read to find out
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The synopsis and grammar need a brush-up. It doesn't do justice to your story. Your story has so much potential. The scenes need a bit of coherence and flow. Other than that, it's definitely worth a read. Keep up the good work Author!!!
There are grammar errors, I suggest you proofread first. but, overall it's good!ㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤㅤ
The story is good and heart warming, though needs some improvement... I like it very much! keep updating Daily more❤️
The story has potential going forward . I would however advise the author to proof read his work before publishing as he tends to make minor grammatical as well as spelling mistakes which could douse down the pace of the story. Otherwise it has potential given that the tittle takes many readers to their nursery days with rhyms, which I feel is the true genius in the creation of the story.