/ Book&Literature / Magical Marvel (HP X MCU)
摘要
[A SI Harry Potter and Marvel (MCU) Xover Fanfiction]
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A sick 16 year old MC dies at the same time, emerald eyes open up confused. Shouldn't I be dead? Why the hell am I so tiny? What's her name? What are these voices in my head?
Follow the young telepath as they make way in a world of gods and magic. Will they make their mark in this scary world or did they already do so. F*ck, time travel is really confusing.
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I will admit that the first part of the story is pretty bad. It was my first time writing anything for fun so I was pretty green. If you're prepared to suffer through the first twenty chapters or so, and the story should get a lot better.
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I don't own pretty much anything in this Fanfic.
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Well, I'd like everyone to know that the Main Character is a Female, so the boys won't read waste their time like me 😂 No offense to the girls but I'm a Male and I'd rather stick to reading stories with Male Main characters.
This should not be in the male lead section It was a surprise that the protagonist is not male, I also did not find a label that says that she is a female protagonist, I hope and I can fix it
Writing Quality: Fine Updating Stability: Good enough Story Development: Way to slow for my liking, and is all over the place. Half the chapters are based in the past, and we don’t even see our mc in the current time until like chapter 30. I want to read about Harry Potter/MCU, not random backgrounds I don’t care about. I don’t even understand what is happening 90% of the time, which makes it annoying and a chore to read. Character Design: The mc is boring, not all that likeable, and forgetable (Considering I can’t even remember her name, or really anything other than her becoming Deaths pet). World Background: MCU and Harry Potter but more confusing, Random characters are thrown in, confusing timeline that makes little sense and isn’t really explained (like at all). Half the characters are Oc’s that I don’t care for at all. There’s more chapters on other characters than on the mc herself (I only read up to chapter like 30-40). Overall: It all matters on taste, you’d have to read it yourself to really decide. Don’t let my review stop you. I just suggest the author makes it less confusing and stops with the unnecessary Oc’s, as it gets really boring to read after a while. like, I like slow stories, but this is a bit much, even for me (someone who’s read 2500+ fanfics). I’d also prefer if the mc was fleshed out more. But the thing I would like to see the most, is far less flashback chapters, as they just aren’t at all fun to read. And introduces characters i’ll forget about in an hour.
Hands down, one of my favorite stories on this website. I unknowingly spent hours just straight binge reading, but I don't regret it.
The book starts off HORRIBLY. I barely managed to get past chapter 2 due to how convoluted and forced the story seems. Voldermort did not kill HP's parents (HP does not even exist in fact, instead it is a pair of twins). Voldermort was defeated due to the female twin in the far future had put up a protection spell to protect her past self. The twins then got separated by Dumbledore since he thought the male was the chosen one (sexist?). The female twin then got to live like HP, but got abandoned before gaining memories of her past life. She then goes back in time like 5000 years and basically becomes many of the important figures throughout time. She then gets brought back during the goblet of fire movie. She rejects accepting her parents, but accepts her siblings. Her parents refuse to not act as her parents, even though she made it clear they are not to do so. She then was revealed to be a "dark" wizard, even though she did not use the magic to harm people. This led to the parents abandoning her, even though she made it clear she did not want them in the first place. She sets up Dumbledore to reveal he is evil and fakes her death. Then she helps her brother defeat voldermort at the graveyard. After this, the parents once again tried to make it out like they accepted her, even though she NEVER agreed to accept them and they went too far too many times. As you can see, the story is VERY complex. The story has a bunch of times where we see events throughout history that she impacted. These events are almost all boring and can be skipped with minimal impact to the reader's enjoyment. The story has now reached a point where I no longer care what happens in the story, so I am stopping here (chapter 66). I rate the story a 2.5 (where 2.5 is average), which is high because I originally was going to rate it a 1 based on the first 2 chapters.
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*Some spoilers* I’m at chapter 12 right now, qaiting for the next to be released :) Personally, i really really like this stor. But it is not for everone, the mc is kinda op and there’s a timetravel element so her age is kinda all over the place. She’s had a sad childhood - dursleys abuse and abandon stuff. However there is so much potential in the world with all the different heros and villains, it’s why i just love marvel and harry potter crossovers, too bad a lot of them don’t end. I hope this one does 🥺. I cant wait to see how the story will advance, how she will interact with other charactors and which villains she’ll defeat. Thank you author!
If you haven't started reading this, then don't start. After 100 chapters I can tell you this was one of the most painful reads I had. The author constantly contradicts themselves and the world he made. The is nothing natural about the development of the story, things just happen because the author says I does no matter how much it contradicts everything they has already been stated the power of PLOT will force it anyway. I'm sure if you started to read this at the beginning you haven't noticed how many contradictions there are but at this point it's just to painful to keep reading. That being said I can't really blame the author you CAN notice they get better but honestly the story was completely ruined with the flashbacks and the time travel, I'm pretty sure the author didn't realize how difficult it would be to keep track of them and by the time they did they were already way too deep and needed to keep them. At the end it was just one bad narrative decision that forced the plot and in order to correct it the story became forced. It had potential ad I'm sure it gets a lot better later on but if you are starting from the beginning the contradictions are just too much, but hey maybe you have more patience than I, I couldn't really get past the beginning so I have to stop, at this point the story just makes me frustrated. That's all.
150-ish chapter review Writing The quality of this book is at the LoM level of grading. The author can make you feel anxious, happy, and many other different emotions through the thought process of the MC. I really like it when certain main characters interact with the MC like their own mother. For world development, 5/5 stars for the author.He basically explains every possible thought process of how the world is perceived by different people. From history to society. (For example, mutant uprisings and political power wizardry). For Story. I think the author has an interesting story. But the execution is a mess. By the time the story gets to the juicy part, it has already lost its color. It's like too much flashback and a lengthy canon event. (But in the Marvel volume, everything is original and I love it.) For MC development. I'm sorry, but for me it's already lost. The moment she becomes a time traveller, she becomes tasteless. The early chapter of her journey to the outside world is the most entertaining story I read in this novel. Like learning telepath, making alfred, breaking into account of evil doctor. That is the most enoyable chapter I read in this novel. But it's okay, the author is trying to cope with the student she has. I enjoy reading Jean's POV and Wanda's. But yeah. It's like you want to eat chicken nuggets but only get the fries.
Great work, I really like it. I especially like WBWL-stories and this fits right in. Just keep the updates coming, this is one of my favourite fanfictions on this site at the Moment! :)
As much as I liked the idea for the plot, how it was developed turned to be confusing and horrible to read.
It's not bad per say... But this novel has startling similarities a few fanfiction.net novels. It's not copy/paste. However the similarities were enough that I almost dropped it- Because I thought it was one I already read. The Time Traveling premise reminds me a lot of the novel *A Long Journey Home* by Rakeesh. The chapter format seems to be alternating between past/present timelines. Something admittedly I'm not very fond of- As chapters that expand upon the past can feel a lot like fillers... Even if they're important plot points. Additionally it's best to warn people that this fiction demonizes Dumbledore a lot. I wouldn't say he's evil... But the story makes him out to be something akin to a genius moron*If that makes sense*. He's magically/politically intelligent... But he's subscribed to a set of ideals that have no grounding or merit.
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It's good stuff. I like where this is going. Although I almost dropped it becouse of the beguining and thinking this a reupload from FF . net.
lost me on the 4th chapter. built up Jasmine's character and background for three chapters, only to have it change into a transmigrated FMC.. it felt so "off" that i couldnt get past chapter 5. Honestly thought i could get past the FMC thing, but the change from Jasmine to this other person was just too weird for me.
I don't like the flow of the story, the pace change sudenly when the new character enter the mind. It goes from a abused 8 years old with good memory, to a "16 years old" who seems 80. It's like one night the author has the Idea to add 2-3 world, and alternate universe, and the protagonist become OP without notice,, the protagonist suddenly know how all things work, can make money at 8 years old, is a programmer, a wizard, use telepathy to control people, a X-man etc... The First 2 chapter had a good flow, then suddenlly 8 years, 14 years, The protagonist is powerfull and in 2 min can hack internet and anderstand all the world. That's a bad build up for the character design and the world design. Like the author wanted to do all the things possible in one try....
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I have to say I don't like the recent chapters where jasmine is so easily pushed around and she doesn't retaliate and the dark magic fiasco where they jasmine Nathan and Dumbledore were going in circles about dark magic and her being a dark witch she knew their concept of dark witch and hers was different but she didn't clear it up and made everyone believe she is their version of dark witch and it seemed just kinda forced
By far this is the best HPxMarvel novel and one of the best HP novel I've ever read (can't say anything about MCU for now), it's not the usual hp fanfic and the mc is blended in the MCU in one of the most original way I've seed, the way the story develop is unique, can't wait to read more!!
Amazing stuff so far an interesting MC and some interesting choices in crossovers. I can’t wait to see how this fanfic turns out. Yes yes I yes yup yup yes yup yes I yes
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An excellent novel that is very well written . I really like how the author has explored HP magic and taken it to new hights. The latest chapter which I am on has sort of ended HP Canon in a way and marvel part of the story is probably going to kick in. Excited to see just what the author has got planned for us and exactly what has Jasmine been up to for the many milliana she has been alive, hope the author sheds some light on it , maybe some filler chapters for the many lifetimes she has lived.
I am giving the story five stars because ... well everybody does it. I don't understand the ranking and power stuff on this website but whatever idc. I get inspired by a lot of fanfics that I only remember a few plot points from. The prologue is pretty much copied from "Rise of Arcane" from FF . net as a starting point. I adapted it for my use. If you catch any idea I used taken from another FF, tell me to properly give them credit. The plot is essentially already planned out. But I can make some modifications if I think I’ll need them. The story is about a girl who dies and is reborn as Jasmine Potter. She accidentally goes back in time and goes on adventures then. It’s gonna be a mix between the current plot (1990s) and the flashbacks. I got the idea from “A Long Way Home” also on FF. I'm doing this for fun and to improve my writing (speed and quality), if you don't like it just don't read it but try to be respectful please.