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摘要
Ranulf never thought he would open his eyes again, as he laid in his own pool of blood. Unaware and ignorant of the portrayals of destiny.
After the curtains of his existence collapsed, a new and fascinating life began. He transmigrated on the Pengolla—the magical world, filled with mythical creatures and cruel demons and powerful wizards—inside the boy named Kadyn. He thought he could live a peaceful life after finding out that his predecessor had no talent in magic.
However, things never go according to the way we want them to be. Out of nowhere, a voice sounded in his head that shattered his world before it could take form inside his memory.
[Host transmigrated successfully]
[Host need to find a shop in twenty-four hours, or his soul will dissipate]
Follow Kadyn on this fantastic journey, and see how he will overcome all the hardships and challenges in the future. How would he save himself and his family and his shop from greedy people? And how would he become a hunter instead of hunted after learning the harsh lesson from life?
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I am not good at reviews and am not qualified to judge writing quality. All I can say is that this book so far is quite enjoyable. I look forward to many more chapters. Give this book a try and hopefully you will enjoy it too.
I wont deny, i enjoyed book.. it is one of the very few system based novels that i like, but unfortunately there are two huge loopholes in the plot in recent chapters. that turned my mood sour. 1. about khrom and rayna: khrom was incredibly guilty after he misjudged his wife and killed he, but suddenly he started new married life, just after a few months.. how does that make sense?? i would have no complaints if his wife was killed by others, then the story makes sense.. but when aythor added that he misjudged his wife, killed her and incredibly guilty for his action, romantic development with rayna doesn't make sense. 2. this one is way more fatal than previous one. both siblings seldom remember their parents. okay, even if i understand that they are worried inside, but dont have the power to do anything, thats why they are just waiting.. thats also good. but suddenly mc went on a business trip, he didnt think that his parents can come back in mean time. okay they were aboyt to come back in some days, so that does not matter. most importantly, after accidentally arriving into anothet empire, why are they settling down. instead of going back.???? why did her sister said nothing when mc proposed to start a shop in the capital?? if author notice my review, i would be grateful if you are kind enough to give me a proper explanation. or please correct these two loopholes, such obvious loopholes hurt my head. anyway, you rock, thank you for writing such an amazing book. please dont make it trash in later stages, or i will cry.. for me this is a master piece
Near chap 50 60 the story become unbelievable. The characters are weird, interaction weirder, everyone in this world is a arrogant - backstaber - young master - dumb grunt - idiot (chose some and mix them you have 99% of the character). And this make the story go bad. The idea of the shop is good but the story dev and charac dev are ruining it. Its honestly tiring to read again and again and again about Im X and Im gonna trash your shop. Oh no I get beaten. Lets call Y and he will trash your shop loop. Plus there is no law system at all it seems ? You can kill people and and be fine with that. Its a bit weird in modern settings, and it doesnt help with the story here because of the huge ammount of murderer/criminal in the world (all except the mc sister so far, so about 99.9%, even if we could say mc is kind of justified) The writing is average. Not bad, not exceptional. Anyways im disapointed in the story. I can t keep reading it.
If you like reading about an arrogant egoti idiot. then this is the book for you The author is a good author I didn’t see any grammatical errors or major problems with the story that make it unreadable. But the main character is so arrogant and stupid that I’m surprised that he’s not dead by chater 5 I will keep reading the book for now see if there’s any character growth maybe he becomes humble later on in the book.
It's well written, but the MC is an idiot (Mother is lying on the sofa with heavy dark circles under her eyes, sweating with a tired appearance two red snakebite marks on her neck... Thought of MC: "She's tired but okay, I won't bother her."), asking stupid questions of the system (What is a meditation room for?), making stupid mistakes (Without any strength wanting to travel the world through a portal where beasts, monsters and demons live, for the same reasons, leaving the house at night to investigate a figure he saw and going carelessly towards 2 suspicious people arguing in the dark, to make worse 2 powerful people.) and showing a brave and confident front to the point of hitting anyone who offends his store, but then he shakes in fear, freezes and gets beaten by someone who is weaker than him (the fat one had 5 stars, he had 5 fire plus 2 or 3 other elements), the system explains the most obvious things possible, which I would think normal if he explained everything or almost everything, but there are many things that are not explained as to why or how, and the MC just does it as if he already knows but doesn't know why (like the price of the store's servicesor how they work, how the system doesn't take anything from the money that customers pay "it all goes to the MC", but when one of his family uses it, he loses money).
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Well written story about a complete moron. It was one of those MC's that I was hoping would just die from his own stupidity but he kept being saved by ever-present plot armor
I don’t know what to say. I really like this shop novels but this story is too dumb. Mc has some hard anger issues . Gets beaten by a weakling but acts incredible hard against ppl that could pinch him to deaths . The icharscter nteractions are just unbelievable and he is a Simp. Mom has some red marks and is obviously ill, yeah why should I care . Everybody can do what he wants . There should be at least Some basic laws . Why then bother with money and not rob everything ? First he gets thrashed and then he behaves like a king . I can’t Read It anymore .
If you're looking for a system that is different from the new norms since a certain Vampire System, this is definitely a great novel so far, the author says to give it 10 chapters, but I was hooked right away. I was looking for something with the merchant vibe and this definitely hit the spot.
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I want to like this story, but MC is so dumb, and as of chapter 51, I feel like everyone aside from MC's family is evil. All character I 1st thought was their friend turned out to be evil/betrayal/rapist. I have grown to like some characters only to know they were actually bad and a fate worse than death await them. MC is also very stupid and acts antagonistically to everyone annoying him. There's nothing to gain from acting as such aside from creating unnecessary enemies. The fact that he kills someone but feels nothing is also minus to me. But that's just me. No insult intended to the author.
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The granmer is above the average in webnovel. The updates are consistent. You charecter needs a lot of work. The charecter acts like a 13 Year old boy. who’s second chance at life did’t tought him anything. The charecter made referances of Mc systems but doesn’t understand why his system has a quirky personality. World building is big part of the story, so, far the setting of your story remains vague. Please go more in detail to understan The circumstances your charecter is under base on the locations he is. and please read a business book. Your charecter setting is a business, your buSiness Sense sucks, honestly.
Hiya author, The book is lit. The system adventure is too great to describe well. I love how MC is gonna create a world by his own. The power, struggle and journey aka adventure seems promising. Highly recommended to the new authors and those who love adventure. Free warriors ,go read this book. It is a lit.
I read 30 chapters and the Mc is still as stupid as the first chapter. I just can't stand it, I'm sure the novel will improve (I think the author had to torture himself to write about such a stupid Mc), this novel is not for me. Written through Google Translate
it's good to see indian authors nowadays writing amazing Stories keep it up bro and don't ever to drop the story.the story is amazing and unique really like to follow the whole story.and yeah please make a discord server for it it will be fun.
Am glad fate led me to this wonderful piece of art! it's suspense filled and the character design is just outstanding. Am dying to know more about Kayden and hope this book goes far. Good job Author on this novel! Do add more chapters soon.
One of the most amazing fantasy fiction! Highly recommended! Although I have read only a few chapters of the story. It has already hooked my interest. Keep up the good work author.
Have you ever met a person who makes you feel stupider while just listening to them? The main character of this novel is even worse than that, and you just feel stupider reading about him. It's so bad that when something happens in the book, you can think about stupidest thing you could ever think about doing in that situation, and the MC will do something stupider then that.
Well, the book is well-written. The only thing that bothers me is because the MC is totally inexperienced but of course he can also gain that, hoping for the story and the MCs stable growth.