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This is only a sample. i have signed a contract with webnovel and the story will be up after editing in a short while here under the same title.
Here is the link to the full book.
https://www.webnovel.com/book/little-girl's-wild-side_21129307106524005###
Gautham bend down to bury his head on Sindhu's shoulders and said, " Will you say 'Yes' already!"
What surprised Sindhu was the tinch of desperation in his voice.
How did Gautham end up feeling so much for her in a matter of a month???
Even Gautham did not know how desperate he was to make her his. Just now when he saw Sindhu make such adorable face, he felt something break inside him at the thought that she will be showing such faces to someone else if she ended up marrying someone else.
"Its driving me crazy you know. The things that you are making me feel.", Gautham said with a slightly annoyed voice.
Sindhu did not say anything. She just tightened her hold around him and stayed in his embrace.
After a while, Gautham finally let her go. He took one last look at her face, quickly said his bye and left. He feared if he stayed any longer, he would start begging her.
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This is my first work. So i hope people can give it a shot. But this one is going to be very different from the stories you would have seen in here. They are literally worlds apart.
There is no backstabbing ex or a greedy relative or a dark haunting past. This is a pleasant light love story of two people facing arranged marriage.
A slightly messed up wild woman and a very normal clumsy man.
the story should have about 60 chapters and the whole story for most parts is complete. So it wont get dropped in the middle.
Hope you like it.
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Is Bangaloy cold? This is truly an anomalous phenomenon. As far as I remember, even in December there was +35 degrees Celsius and humidity of about 60 percent. It is not surprising that the girl disappeared into the air, because the ISRO object was located in Bangalore, this explains everything. As far as I have heard contractual marriages in India, and love marriages, speaking softly, were little favored among Brahmins. Well, so my friend from Rourke, in the state of Uttar Pradesh, told me. In general, this is a sweet, simple romantic short story written in a simple and understandable language. great to say.
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Dear author.. after your recommendation I read this book... After reading the full story I think it is just osammm..... So real.... Thank you....
Wow...!!!! Just wow...!!!! Loved ur creation author...!!!! I really enjoyed reading it..!!!! Well done...!!! One small concern..... After few chapters u hv jus swapped the mother names of both leads... Initially FL's mom name was Aruna and ML's mom name was Renuka BUT later on it was changed...!!!! This is Jus a gentle pointer...!!!!🙂
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this story is so beautiful 😍 sooo thoughtful. .there is so much in a person's life and show that so beautifully with your words 👍👍👍👍👍💛💛💛💛💛❤❤❤❤❤❤💖💖💖💖💖💖💖💖
A short and awesome story 💝💝💝💝 Nice work author!!!! I loved the story a lot 😍😍😍😍😍 A nice book with Indian characters and setting... Keep it up author 😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍😍
Merci pour ce roman. Tout l’histoire était complète. Les personnes, leur personnalité... sa fait du bien ce genre de livre: on ressent l’est émotion de tes personnes et on veut lire tout de suite la suite. Désolé flemme pour le mettre en anglais 😅
All right, I'm here to give you some tips after what you say in the forum. First of all, if you want to upload chapters, do so in moderation. I can see that you uploaded more than five chapters a day on average, that's not ideal to gain popularity, especially for a chance to get featured at the "Daily Updates" section. From what I have gathered, it is best to upload the first two to four chapters at once, then upload two chapters a day until it you have 15-20 chapters in. After that, just upload once everyday consistently. Based on my (and others') experience, you will have a greater chance to be featured by chapter 30 this way. Currently, this genre of realistic contemporary romance is not on trend here. You may want to switch for another genre if you want to write again in the future. It doesn't have to be CEOs, you can go for fantasy romance or magical realism too (a girl with unique power, for example). Now, let's go for the technical issues in your writing. You have a bad habit of writing in monotone, thus become "choppy": when you write a paragraph, you often start with the same word for every sentence in it. For example: She.... She.... She.... After she... While she... Even though we, as readers, can understand the story, this may be a source of irritation for many others. Another bad habit you have is writing triple question marks. Why would you do that, when one is enough? Once again, this is tiny neglect that may irritate readers. Ah, yes. Title! you need an interesting title for the chapters to keep the readers intrigued! Last but not least... Congratulations author, for completing your book. You are one of the few, if not the only one I have ever seen writing their book until the end even with few or no fans supporting you. I really applaud your commitment. If you want to seek inspiration, I do recommend you to join the inkstone discord server. You can meet me and many others, from bottom to the top ranking there. :)
The flow of story keeps you on the edge. Its like a rollercoaster ride. I just think the writing can be improved. There is a lot of grammatical errors. Other than that story is pretty good.
Yo, you asked for a review, so here goes: 1. The biggest problem with this story is that it's not been edited. The grammar is mid-level, but it gets better as the story goes on. I suggest downloading Grammarly if you can't anyone -- it's not a perfect editor but it'll help a lot with the basic mistakes and spelling. 2. Try not to shift between first person and third person in the same sentence. For instance, in the first chapter there was 'his mom asked her some questions regarding my studies and other general stuff and she answered them politely as she can.' There are other times it happens in the story and it stands out negatively. Referring to the same sentence, keep the language precise. Use words like 'stuff' sparingly or not at all. It would be better to just enumerate directly, like 'studies, the weather, the state of the nation, the heat in Bangalore, the rice of bananas in Puerto Rico' and so on. Being more precise with language gets you more pro points, haha! It just looks more professional and reads better. 3. The draw of a romance is the push and pull between two main leads, and the ******* it causes with the surrounding characters. One way of the best and simplest methods to show ******* in a romance is DIALOGUE. Your story's too descriptive. In most cases, too descriptive means too passive. A romance can be gentle, it can be slow, it can be enduring, but definitely should not be passive. I'm not saying you should make them scream and shout at each other all the time or write a story where the characters just talk without doing something...I'd drop that kind of story like a hot pan. More dialogue between the major characters, between the main leads and secondary characters, between different secondary characters, is a way of adding more depth and ******* to the story. A romance novel is best written with 60% dialogue and 40% description. Don't ask me which book that was written in, 'cause it's been so long I don't remember, haha... 4. Is the last chapter the end? It's a rather unsatisfying end, yo... The story in general has too little *******. Try adding a little more conflict here and there. TL;DR Shore up your writing basics, get an editor, let your character's actions be your description, polish your dialogue. The writing lacks ******* but it has potential. There are more than a few guides to writing romance and fiction in general that can be downloaded. Keep on writing and don't give up! You just need more experience.
I just got to know about this story on Webnovel. At first, I wasn't interested in adding another book to my already reading stack but this seems quite interesting. I haven't read it yet but will read definitely. The arrange marriage genre is quite interesting. ANd it's been time since I haven't read any. So I will read it in my free time. The story seems short and interesting.
I will be honest i dont like romance novels at all usually its like dousing me in holy water but, yours was different. Your story was very smooth and easy to read, i had a bit of trouble stoping because for once romance was not completely boring. Your description of world and characters was great small error is your punctuations. Some words did not match the sentence like you were trying to write did but wrote do instead. Besides that is a hidden gem.
Can I just say that I love this book so much!!😍😍😍 I love the chemistry and trust that our main protagonists are building up as they get to know each other better. It's the type of story that makes you believe in love and people again. The whole story do far seems gentle and more relaxing than other romance novels that have cheating boyfriends, betrayal, ice cold CEOs, etc. Author, thank you so much for writing this book. Please continue writing and don't ever stop, even if some haters tell you to. Love, A Loyal Fan🤗
The chapters from 16 onwards are not showing. The spaces are blank and empty. Does anyone know what is going on. Great story tho....from the chapters that i have read (1-15)[img=update][img=update][img=update]
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Wow! The plotline is refreshing and fun! For your first time, you're doing a great job, author! There are few grammatical errors, but they don't make it hard for the novel to be read.