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Dominic was always alone, isolated even, but after a terrifying incident at his youth group, he was sent to Salvatore Boarding School for the Young and Gifted. Arriving at the same time as Landon and Raphael, can Damian overcome his trauma, and his isolation?
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One of the best legacies fanfiction harem.. hope there's no yuri.. and more harem please ... ...................... .... ...well mc is okay too
I like it. Although its confusing sometimes cuz a scene break is in the same paragraph as the other scene. Its also confusing who is talking sometimes especially when therr are multiple people talking. But other than that, its good
Great story. The only problem I have with it is that there is too much dialogue. It makes the story seem disjointed. Like all the characters are lining up to talk to him. My advise would be to slow down the pace and describe his feelings or thoughts more. I mean he barely had a reaction to the revelation about supernaturals. It felt a little like you were speed running the first couple of episodes. Set up his background more. Try to describe the settings in every new scenery as much as you can without going overboard. I can't say I'm a fan of how the Church affects the MC. I think it changes everything about the vampire diaries when you bring into question the legitimacy of exorcism. Are you going to introduce angels, demons and biblical figures like in high school dxd? I'm sure you could have introduced other weaknesses to the character without making the world bigger than it already is. This is just my opinion and not a criticism.
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Genuinely well written with few mistakes, the characters sound like they should, the mc and the dialogue are engaging and it's overall enjoyable to read.
It's a good story and it's a shame that it has been abandoned or at least I think it has. If anyone knows some long legacies, originals or vampire diaries fics on here, fanfiction.net,ao3 or wattpad please do tell me in the comments
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man I'm not going to lie this s*** is boring the quality is okay updates are a little slow the story is okay I guess the main character is okay in the world background is all right overall I wouldn't read it
Well done, so up my ally, my favorite legacies fanfiction yet.