Last Wish System

I have yet seen a proper review of this so here it is; my first objection towards this novel is the overly positive reviews. There are spelling errors, they are frequent, they give the wrong meanings and so on. It seems like the author has great trouble with making his sentences actually say what he means. Example: The author also seems to have trouble with not word ****ting too much which makes this all the more hard to read. As an example: “After advancing, Yale started to switch between training his Origin Qi and practicing Basic Healing.” –Chapter 52: Entering the Special Realm. This could easily have been written like this: “After advancing, Yale began to practice both his Origin Qi and Basic Healing by alternating between the two.” More examples from the same chapter as before; “Increasing the Origin Qi is equivalent to increasing the Origin Points, that would let him use more skills in battle, and that was important in front of a dangerous situation, and he was sure that the special realm would have a lot of dangerous situations.” Rewritten to; “Increasing ones Origin Qi is equivalent to increasing ones Origin Points which would allow him to use more skills in battles.” I think most people would be able to understand the importance of Origin Qi + Origin Points in battles… Btw it is okay to use,” and “but please for the love of god do not use two (ands) in once meaning it gives me cancer. Anyways it has potential. It is just not the right tone and setting for me because of the aforementioned problems and the inconsistent world building. If you want to be able to build your world so that it would be consistent, consider using a .txt with definitions written down and changes in it so you can control your writing.

I will try to write a "real" review that is as objective as possible. I have Mixed Feelings so far about this Novel as a whole and I was reaalllly sceptical in the beginning but realized that the Story got increasingly better from the Beast Trial Arc onwards. The First part will be more objective while the latter contains some more subjective thoughts and feelings. I give the writing quality 3.5 Stars. Leaving Missing words, grammar, mispelling and punctuation aside (which All got increasingly Bit better as chapters move on), I want to give probs for the author's really long chapter lengths. What I Wonder is if author is conciously or subconciously avoiding the description of places and scenery. I didnt really have good Imagination of the Clan Territory, the mansion, Fights Tournament, Beast forest (here a Bit better) or the Academy Arc right now. I would recommend to Focus on it instead of avoiding. Can only improve the Immersion into the Story. This might be considered as Part of 'World Building' but a good author shouldnt Lack in writing about the environment. Also what I realized for the beginning is the Lack of Dialogues and characters but I will Talk more about it later on. Stabiliy of Updates, I binged it but give it 5 Stars :) Story development is a big General term but I will Drop a Lot of stuff here, might be little messy and not structured but most is concerning stuff in the First 12 chapters. I don't have anything to say against the places that MC Travels to except that I would have expected a little more danger in the 'Beast Trial' arc. In General I think there is Not enough Tension, less dangers -> less excitement and therefore it feels too easy. Author mentions World Law protection till the Age of 10 but I Dont remember to have read a reasonable explanation. Sure, it is convinient but it Sounds Just random to me. MC's stat distribution is kinda random as Well for my Taste in the beginning. Gains several in the Beginning week or so but then needs 6 MONTHS to gain a Bit more? It is said that the training from 7-8 is comparable to Level 1-7, but why is that so? Again out of convinience? Why bother introducing low grade medicinal pills that seem to be Worth nothing much but then scrap that concept after MC gains self healing? I would have suggested to just leave out the pills and make MC train more. Then the increase in his stats might also Look more Natural. Why is MC so good in archery from the getgo? I mean yes he is 'knowledgable' but does that automatically Transfer to practice? At least in the sword mastery He had to practice the foundations but archery seemed to be like a Walk in the Park to me. Too easy. That brings us to my next Point. Let's Talk about the System. Yes, the classical System. Some May Take it for granted that Systems give MC's Advantages but I see a difference if a System is balanced or Not. MC's Last-Wish-System is from his mysterious previous Incarantion that We will surely learn more about in the Future. The System doesn't make him OP yet. But it 'grants' him rewards for fullfilling Task of different difficulty. What I didn't like about the System and the Training : 1.Archery too good for No reason and improves too fast (aside from knowledge) 2.Tasks relation to rewards is too ridiculous So he shoots arrows for sometime, gets higher innate Archery skill rewarded and shoots more too get better rewards? I would have suggested to make archery a skill that gets better over time and usage instead of an innate Talent that is Just granted. In General the whole innate skills and elemental affinities and All those granted high/perfect Grades, are too cheap for my Taste. Contrary, this Situation is far better handled later on. The stealth skill improves by hiding from beasts, Water affinity improves (to perfect :p) by ingeniously modifying a skill/spell (dunno), healing/time affinity improves through enlightment. This Sounds soo much better than Just getting them granted with perfect grade from beginning on with no efforts to improve them. I also liked that instead of being just granted, some stuff is received through influence of environment (healing/time affinity. The most ridiculous One was that Just by gaining a perfect sword Master MC also gains perfect sword Talent, where is the relation? I Just want a reasonable explanation. The reasoning for why MC Chose the Origin Path or the circumstances around it, why he only had that 4 choices, I don't feel good about this but this Point isn't that important so I will leave it at that. Next Point is the Magic in the Academy. Would have been nice too have more theoretical Magic backround Info similiar to the healing lesson. But that's ok. Might have been too much to have everything at Once. I give it for All of this 3,5 Stars. I will pull Forward to the worldbuilding Rating. I give it 4 Stars. We are 30 chapters in but I Dont really get that much about the World. Might be too early, but what about the City? Country? Sects? Political groups? Something? World Law was touched upon, is that relevant later on? Character Design, 3,5 Stars because it gets better later on, this One is also longer. The MC is a little too plain but it's ok for the beginning. What I Dont like about him is that his knowledge is used to superficial. He knows some sword techniques, archery skills, knows about poisonous fruits and plants. I would have suggested to use more definite examples to Express his knowledge rather than Just saying that he knows it. The beginning Arc in the Clan (mansion/house/Territory?), I realized later at the Academy why I didnt like this Arc much. It had too few characters, Interactions and Dialogues. Also the characters that were involved (father/master/sister) weren't expressed enough. Father is mentioned as cold hearted but why Not show it/him in action? Master is supposed to be eccentric and weird but I got nothing of that, when he was introduced, through his behaviour. Sister is ok. She got some more Showtime. I would have also suggested to use the crowd/servants/other Clan members more. They are supposed to be ignorant and underestimating the MC, why Not show some Dialogues to Prove that? "Emperor Domination" has Tons of arrogant people who underestimated MC and are proved otherwise later on. What it has too much, this One had too few. The Academy Part is much better, We have some rivals, teachers Talk more and notice MC, the other Students also Take Note of him. Much better. I also noticed that author uses rather the narration to Express the mood of the scene than the Dialogues/(inner)Monologues. Hope it gets balanced. In conclusion I would say that this novel gets better as chapters move on. If someone Else is also sceptical I would suggest to keep up or skim Till chapter 13 where the Beast Trial Begins. From then it got better in my opinion, and the Academy Arc is even more better.