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This story has been discontinued. This was my first attempt at writing and mistakes were made but I've learned from them. I will continue to improve my writing to create a story that both you and I can enjoy fully.
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1. I got a dig bick 2. You that read wrong 3. You read that wrong too 4. You checked 5. You smiled 7. You are wandering why you are still reading this 8. You saw that mistake, right? (On 7) 10. But did you see that I skipped 6? 10. You checked 11. And saw you that I doubled 10 and skipped 9 12. I said "saw you" not you saw 13. I also skipped 2 14. You got tricked 15. Follow me for exp ;) 16. I'm just wasting your time, but if you were entertained, leave a like and happy reading!
This novel was good. It had decent writing quality, interesting character, and cool ability concepts. Everything was going well, until the system was introduced. There was absolutely no point to it. It was enjoyable watching Leo find out how his abilities worked himself, but then it was just handed to him. When he had the abilities on there own it made sense. No one else had a system, but now he suddenly has one. The system brought nothing to the story, except make it generic and annoying.
loving the story so far but I really haven't seen much of the world yet besides where the character is in the story or how big the world is would like to get some info on that
i am rating it 3. but I'll change it. just tell me few things, at novel is long. so I'll first ask it. there is a dark tag. thats why I am here. so can mc kill innocent people if he need to. can he betray and ditch people or friends if he need to. or he is the type of simp who suffer cruelty and now will solve problem for random strangers and be their hero. or shout that I have suffered enough so I'll remove darkness, blah blah cliche cringe trash talk. just answer them. in either case I'll remove this review as I just wish to enquire not rate low random novels. 👍
it has dark tag but Mc likes to play the hero. mc stupid plays the hero. first remove that tag......................................... ............
Can't wait to see more of this story definitely has a great potential of being a great story in the future.Will follow it until the end of the story
i like the concept and how the mc was introduced, but it is way too v fast paced example: at the beginning when he gets his power theres a test of if he’s worthy by breaking a wall. Instead of having to practice learn experiment etc. with his new power he just breaks the wall… also i don’t think the author really understands what kinetic energy is…
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Hey bro this is pretty good and if you need any ideas or inspiration go to wattpad the app and look for a book called energy by somboodeh. Its on hiatus and has been for a long time but the main character has similar power. so thats it hope it helps in some way or gives some ideas to you.
Not my cup of tea but its nice. .................................. ......... ................ ........................................... ......... ................ ...........
I don't have that much to say about this novel other than good, especially the mc he is one of the best on this website, and the other characters are going well and the world is showing a good potentials
started off as something really good and a main character with something unique in terms of power but over time with him getting a system among other things it just became a generic magic novel and the main character just always seemed fo do the stupidest thing possible and not live up to the 'Dark' tag at all overall really disappointed I loved the start bit overtime it just felt like it became a chore to read but this is only my opinion and I know there are people who like this king of novel.
I'm currently at ch.137. I feel like the system is hindering the potential of the mc. for example I feel like it would be better if the system listed his his abilities as "Fire Manipulation(level xx)" instead of individual moves like fire bolt and fire ball. HE COULD'VE DO ALOT MORE EXCITING STUFF WITH HIS POWERS.. if he wasn't too much reliant on the annoying system.. However, the story is still good, could use a little more romance (Rene x Leo). Overall, the system makes it skill progression boring and I think this is a pretty average novel...
This book is genuinely one of the best I've read. When I caught up to the current chapter (as of writing this) I was upset I couldn't continue with more. I love the progression, the world and story building, as well as how everything plays out. The MC may be OP, but he still acts human, which many authors take away after some point. All in all, I highly recommend this story, as it is easily a favorite of mine. Props to you, author!
This is a very underrated webnovel with an intresting power system and world IMO. But author could you please get a patreon and put all the chpater there Webnovel way overcharges.
Could have been a good read. But unfortunately, story devlopment is too lackluster. After 15 chapters, it became too dificult to continue reading.
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This is my first attempt at writing a story so please forgive my inexperienced writing quality in the beginning chapters. I have big plans for this story, as well as connecting stories that I'll be writing in the future. If you're interested in something like that then you won't be disappointed. I read all your comments and your feedback helps me improve, please don't hesitate to communicate.