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The MC is reincarnated in G.I joes/Fast and furious world with wishes
I am writing this for fun and to pass time also English is not first language so the writing quality is going to suck.
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I was actually very excited to read this book but as soon as I started reading it, I realized that maybe I was too overexcited. For a person who likes reading decent Grammar in a story, I was frustrated by just reading the first three chapters!! It makes me wonder whether English is truly been forsake because there's just too many novels here that lack of it's proper, Grammatical, way of writing.
What about Road block from G.I Joe Retaliation and Hobbs from Fast and Furious 7 they’re both played by Dwayne Johnson?!?!?[img=faceslap] What is your plan for those two characters!?
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Good, idea, decent ploot but the grammar is tragic. If it was misspeled words or problems with he, she, it etc... then it would be ok but this fanfic here lacks entire words from the sentences...
I really like your works.. first The TO/Legacies then the Lorien Legacies(I am number 4) then this Fast and Furious combine with GI Joe... You are writing fantics of all the fics, movies, shows that I like and they are good .. Hope you don't drop them and continue them.. Waiting for more chapters...
Should consider doing a rewrite of the first dozen chapters, you are spelling the words correctly but you are also forgetting to use some words at the same time. Sentences go on for a bit too long, some could use a comma and others would be better if you put a full stop there instead of a comma. I also recommend to change your format a little bit, for example you start sentences with : 'He answered "Yes."' instead of '"Yes." He answered'. The character himself is a bit too energetic for realism, but this story isn't really written as a what if situation and more of a this is what I think I would do in a situation. The story itself is more original than most of the stories on this forsaken website, but the over al quality doesn't make it stick out enough. A rewrite is easy enough but because I guess English is your second+ language I can understand it being difficult. The only problem I actually do have with this story is that I see really old comments and reviews about the grammar and it not being correct in the chapters. Doesn't give a good impression, but alas, you write for fun and practice...
well i really liked it i hope you keep updating it regularly and keep this quality to get worse well i really liked it i hope you keep updating it regularly and keep this quality to get worse [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
why is this in the popular section for fanficsi couldn't even get past the second chapter it basically rushes straight through his childhood this honestly can't be called a story
fantastic maaaaan where is the moreeeeee we need at least 100 additional chapters . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . .. .. . .
Ok, wow I like this story, and I like this a lot, I wish for more but you update once every couple of months!
This is a really great reincarnation story and probably the best F&F mix fan-fic out here. Would love for it to get updated!
Calidad de la escritura 1/5 Estabilidad de las actualizaciones 3/5 Desarrollo de la historia 2/5 Diseño de personaje 2/5 Fondo mundial 2/5
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Needs to be edited for grammar, and pov's need to be added or better thought out. Though I'll try to read more, and hopefully, the grammar will get better, or the author will get it edited and fixed, upside is that it has in interesting story and I haven't seen any other GI Joe stories on here
Tiene una buenas calidad de escritura , detalla muy bien el ambiente como los rasgos de los personajes, y las conversaciones de los mismo están muy bien redactadas, lo único que abrir que hacer para mejorarla sería una actualización menos discontinua y agregar una cronologia histórica más detallas , más allá de eso es muy buen fanfic y ojalá el autor no lo abandone
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Well it could be worse at least you can pass the time I got excited when I read fast and furious, does anyone know if there is Any good works from this movie saga? It would be greatly appreciated.
a couple of chapters made my head hurt ... this must be read without the participation of the brain, because the grammar and composition of the paragraphs is comparable to the Chinese translation.
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