/ Anime & Comics / I Refuse to Become Scumbag in Tokyo
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This is a work of fiction. Names, characters, business, events, and incidents are the products of the author's imagination. Any resemblance to actual persons, living or dead, or actual events is purely coincidental.
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Shishio stared at the beautiful girl in front of him, and he couldn't look away. Her waist might be the narrowest waist that he had ever seen, and he was wondering how it felt to hug that waist. Finally, he made up his mind and decided to say hello to her, but suddenly...
[Target has been found!]
"Huh?"
[Welcome to Scumbag System!]
[The more woman you have, the more rewards you will receive!]
[As a starting gift, you have received "Japanese Food Cooking Mastery"!]
[As the first target has been found, you also receive 500 million yen on your back account!]
[The journey has only been started!]
[Work hard, young man!]
"???????"
Shishio frowned and said, "I refuse!" without hesitation, but after a while...
"I refuse!... I really refuse!... I really try hard to refuse!... Sorry, I can't refuse it...."
Shishio tried really hard, but he couldn't...
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I'll update the chapter when I have nothing to do
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Cover not mine found it on google
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Grammar sometimes sucks but bear with it.
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As long as it's Akikan's work then it's absolute top quality. Also please don't drop this one Akikan-san. Many of your novels have been drop and now I'm still waiting for you to update them.
Alright, here's my take on this novel so far. Although I enjoyed the story but everything is explained in a very long winded manner, for example; I'm currently at chapter 70 and a week of time hasn't even passed within the story. most of the story is written as internal dialogues and not really interaction between characters. And sometimes the logic the MC uses doesn't make sense.. He literally has so many companies and is filthy rich at this point in time, he's still worried about what to do to become successful which makes no sense at all. And the MC is a beta male..
I do not know if it offends someone, my objective is not that. This novel looks like the typical Chinese-Japanese novel with a mc simp, to which the author adds whatever he wants and a half job remains. MC's personality is always changing, sometimes he is very mature, in others very childish, another thing he has is that MC sometimes seems to be someone with experiences in relationship and in others he seems like a virgin who never met a girl. The story progresses too slowly, it is already through chapter 118 and not even a week has passed inside the novel ... I'm sorry if you can't understand it well, i use translator
As long as it's Akikan's fanfic then it's already all 5 for me................................................................................
Another Akibot novel. I wonder where he copied this fanfic from this time. ExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExpExp 1d
I'll be honest, Author. I liked your fic, but your system is very broken, you practically made the protagonist the richest man in the world in less than 48 hours of acquiring the system. And as for the protagonist, I see no reason why the protagonist could turn into a Scumbag who owns a great harem, since so far he is the typical good boy who has no selfish desires or long-term goals. In the first chapter you said that he had to work hard, but until now I don't see him doing it, the system practically gives him skills without him trying. To be called the Scumbag system, it does not fulfill that function. When I read the title of your fic and the first chapter, I thought that the system would force him to have a harem to get rewards, but with the passing of the chapters, I was disappointed. Your system does not impose penalties that force him to have a harem or give him mandatory missions for that purpose, it gives him rewards that are too great just for meeting the possible candidates of his harem, so I do not see it necessary for the protagonist to convert in a scumbag, he would only have to meet more girls and the rewards obtained should be more than enough. On the other hand, I think that the rewards should be given to the protagonist, when he manages to conquer the girl, not when he sees her.
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Writing Quality: 3*: The grammar is fine but because the way the story is written I have to give it 3*. Why? I will have to share how interpret how this story is written. [Main character meets an important character: main character-sanchankunkohai please call me idiot-samakunsanchanniinee] I just can't read the story normally. Updates are fine. Story development 3*. The beginning started out fine but then it just stagnated, it took multiple chapters for one day where I felt like there wasn't even much plot development besides the obvious ranting of the main character. Character design 2*. I liked the prospect of the main character but it all came crashing down when he started interacting with his surroundings. At first I though that that aunt person would be the only one but then it just became worse and worse untill I coun't read any further. World background 2*. In the couple dozen chapters I've read I haven't really learned anything significant about how the world works and what it actually is, my initial guess was that it was an original world with characters from anime etc but then apperantly it was a cliche anime world full of 2d cardboard characters that filled the world. Total score 3.0*. Now don't start saying that I am bad mouthing the story because I will admit that I am doing it but it is still a review on my opinion of the story, but this is in no way trying to discourage you from reading as you have your onw opinion and weird fetishes(though you have to have some weird and sick mind to like such fetishes[Opinion]) so don't start hating. Now my personal opinion: this story is just another generic cliche (Harem/romance/r-18) story on this cursed website that will be long forgotten after the author either drops it or finishes it.
I was going to wait until the end of this fanfic or at least by the end of chapter 500 to write a review, but I've been bottling up something that I think I should let it out here instead of the comment section. My overall rating may looked bad, but trust me, I don't hate this fanfic nor Akikan. I just hope that I don't offend a lot of people because of this. Also, I don't follow Akikan's siscon fanfic, so I'm basing/comparing this fanfic from his first one. Akikan's writing definitely improved from his first work. But there's this combination of words that he always uses in almost all of his paragraph, and that is "He had to admit." I get that being a non-native English speaker, it is difficult to choose different phrases to express something similar in meaning, but reading it over and over is irritating. Akikan did say that this fanfiction is very slow on its story development. People had speak out about this in the past. So, instead of saying the same thing, I'm going to let my star rating speaks for itself. Now, character design. After chapter 200, I'm beginning to hate this main character. The fact that he said to himself that he won't indulge in romance or anything similar before he finishes writing his obviously plagiarized title from the real world, but still did it anyway, irks me to no end. I won't care as much when a character becomes somewhat of a hypocrite in a story with a not snail-like speed on its story development. But bruh, the timeline in this story hasn't even reach six months, yet he catches women left and right like his story is about to end. Unless you're aiming for women with a garden opened for any male that's passing by, women can wait for a month or two. Heck, he even write the plagiarized story as his novel within a night. Surely letting your little brother stay in your pants for just a week isn't that hard. The update stability for this fanfiction is on point. There's nothing other than praises for this one. I say Akikan did a good job. Even after 200+ chapters, the world hasn't been expanded except for a couple of places. You would think that getting huge amounts of shares of different companies for free is going to help building the world, making it more interesting. But nope, those companies are just names for now. I guess Akikan would rather slap more characters from other fiction than Sakurasou and hope that it builds the world he's using instead of introducing places with unique situations. After writing about 2000+ words on this review, I guess the person who reads this got the message that, although I don't hate this fanfic, I don't like it either. I don't have any expectations for this novel, and I'm not confident that he would read this. The main character will most likely add more women to his ever expanding harem, and whines about how his heart couldn't at least love one of them. Personally, I will continue to read this fanfic, but I won't give a stone/day for this. Maybe a couple/week is enough to help this stay on the 'leaderboard' of webnovel... not like my stone is going to change anything.
Please don't drop this one.........................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................................
The reading is enjoyable for the first fifty chapters, but gets very tiring. The author says that he wants a slow pace for this fanfic, I don't see a problem with it being slow, the problem is that it drags on too long. Many chapters could be excluded because they don't add anything to the story. I believe that we could summarize 150 chapters in only 50 or 60. Another tiresome thing is the mentality of the protagonist. He has his conviction of not becoming a scum, this is a good thing in my opinion. This shows that he has principles, but it becomes tiresome to read the same excuse after 100 chapters. There is no acceptance or progression of the protagonist's personality. Final notes. It is an interesting fanfic in the beginning. (Chap 01-50/60). It gets repetitive in the middle. (Chap 51-90/100). Tiring at the end. (Chap 91-150).
Bajingan Tokyo sialan, kita ajak tawuran!! Kita tidak takut ada bozz sendi jangan banyak cingcong coeg [img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins][img=coins]
Shishio stupid and hypocritica l.............................................................................................................................................
After reading this fanfic it's neither of mangaka and sis-con mc type... which is the opposite of Yuuki and Haru... (or maybe either.. lol 😆). so about a normal guy who wants a normal romance...but.. then a system wants him to become a scum bag...harem protag...lol.🤣.. so we know where this is going to😏..lol😆
Bro I will tell you some of my personal frustrations, as well as I won't mind if my comment displeases some fans of Akikan's work, but this story made me so angry that I wanted to comment on it and give a review about it.. (sorry if my spelling is incorrect, as I can't speak English :-; ). Okay, let's start this story, a basic concept presented by several other authors, but because it's basic it's not bad, but what the author will do with it throughout the entire work and I can even say that I liked it at first, to the point of I comment on the chapters and give ''Power Stone''. (I had already seen other Akikan stories and thought he really had an interesting creativity, until I found out that in this story he practically took the plot of another story from China and created on top of it without even giving the least credit on the page fanfic's initial '-' ) Another thing I found interesting is that there are several fanfics with this theme where it brings together several romance and school life animes in the same world, but I realized that they are all very similar from the writing and even the story, however Akikan can diversify from these others... But something that let me down is the main character's lack of charisma and even how all the girls fall in love with him for simple silly reasons, as well as his lack of the overall background. This work simply arrived at a point where Shishio gained some skill thanks to one of his girlfriends and was in this vicious cycle where it would be like this: Girl= Potential for some skill= Will become Shisio's girlfriend= Shishio becomes richer, stronger, handsome...= more girls. Oh really? Like I think I've advanced a little in the criticism, so let's go back a little... Shishio wins a system gets girls and that's it? Honestly, I don't even know where to start criticizing, apart from the fact that I think other readers would like to see the main character having more characteristics without being a perfect guy (I'm pretty sure that if you have someone with the patience to read all this, at least least must have several flaws. For example just reading all this LOL :)... _) I would like more if it detailed the world itself, showing clearly about what surrounds it and even something simpler like the characteristics of the girls where it really had the minimum of focus and it wasn't just several girls wanting the attention of the main character. A long-term problem of the work would also be this HUGE money and INCREDIBLE skills, like I really want to see this author succeed in the future to make people not get tired of seeing the protagonist manage to do everything and have everything at his disposal. Speaking of which, something that is seriously lacking in these stories is having some event in the story that is interesting no matter how small (other than Shishio picking up girls and GG), as well as having some ''problems'' that the main character has to face. If we are going to see every story considered good, it has some characteristics in common and one of them is that not everything goes right momentarily for the protagonist and in this work apparently it will be ''Gary Stu in the world of romance and school life anime''. Sorry if my review was bad, I just typed and went :)
good if you like reading wish-fufillment stories where the MC doesn't have to work hard in order earn anything and gets everything handed to him on a silver platter with a cherry on top.
Pros: Lots of Girls, HAREM, OP MC, Stable Update Cons: Girls easily fall for MC, All Girls ALMOST have the same personality(99%) ,Mean To Canon MC, it's sickening for you to use "Had to Admit" "I have to Admit" word a lot. There's an obvious flaw But "I Have to Admit" it's a fun stories to read when Bored.
started off pretty good, but as time goes on, its just making me want to stop reading, trying to force drama and confusion with "romance"... just making it hard to continue
This novel takes a lot of inspiration from “People Start Clocking In Tokyo.” It’s been a while since I read it on MTLNovel, but here are some of the similarities: 1. A system 2. Moved to Tokyo 3. Nephew of Chihiru 4. Living in Sakurasou 5. Similar cast of characters 6. Relative of Shiina 7. Dislike to Sorata 8. Painting and cooking skills 9. Wagnaria restaurant There are a lot more similarities than just these eight. There are also similar scenes like giving advice to the welcome to sakurasou animation, getting a perfect score in the school entrance exam, sorata showing jealousy to the MC, and much more. Of course, there are differences between the two, like more characters from different animes and different system mechanics. The author probably took concepts from PSCIT and added some of his own flavor to the story. Overall, it’s still a good read to pass the time. If you read PSCIT and liked it, then you will probably like this as well. PSCIT was also dropped by it’s author, so I expect this story to branch off in the future.
(-) As already mentioned, there is no plot here (=) The book draws out only due to the "Hand" and "Name" of the author (+) From the very first meeting with any character, the author best depicts their image from the canon, which I always liked in his previous 2 works. (-) But already in the same chapter, this beautiful character can turn into a dead shell, with only one name. (-) In his previous works, I did not particularly notice this, but this time the degradation of the surrounding characters is the main problem of this work. (+) I liked how the author smoothly and without undue rudeness displaces the previous MC from the canon (+) It looks like the author wanted to create - easy everyday life and ecchi, thereby taking a break from the constant development of MC in siscon. (-) But then I don't understand why he immediately lost his virginity at the beginning of the book, if for 400 chapters there is nothing but ecchi, which makes these chapters hypocritical in my eyes. (=) An unpleasant sensation is caused by his bipolarity - acting, when he tries to flirt or justify himself in front of the girls. All people are hypocrites, so I don't pay attention to it. (=)Now after reading 400+ of this work, my opinion about his previous 2 works has changed for the worse, because of which I am very sad and I decided to leave this work. It feels like I'm watching my favorite anime with terrible voice acting or reading a new volume of a book, at a time when the author has some kind of internal or life crisis. Sediment after the rain smells good But the sediment after a bad job, beloved author, makes you hide and wake up every morning with red eyes Thanks for your hard work
I have a rating system for the fic's I review. 1--> GhostyZ? 0 stars 2--> Random author? 4-(4.5) stars. 3--> Akikan? Duh is that even a question? 5stars of course!