I got reincarnated as Rimuru Tempest

LV 4

chianlao

(There were 7 chapters at the time of writing this) Writing Quality: [Three Stars] The structure of sentences needs to fixed since there are super long sentences without any commas or periods. There are grammar mistakes that need to be fixed, but since english isn't your native language you don't need to worry about it. Story Development: [Three Stars] The story development needs some work since when I was reading it, I didn't know where I was in the story. I thought we were at the end of Tensura since you mentioned the Tenma war but when I read chapter seven, that didn't seem to be the case. You need to make it known how he travels to another world and not just say it. You also need to make it clear which world he travels to since some people won't know the characters. But before that, you need to make it known how he meets the characters unless it's really obvious. Character Design: [Theee Stars] I'm putting it on three stars since people should already know the characters; but you should write down how they look for people if they don't remember, or if they don't know the character. Other than these two things I said, you should be doing a good job. Updating Stability: [Five Stars] I know I shouldn't say how well the updating stability should be, but it looks like you're doing good on it. World Background: [Two Stars] For the worlds he travels to, you should explain it even if it looks out of place. Overall Review: You don't need to listen to me since I don't really know what I'm doing.