/ Fantasy / I Fell In Love With The Demon Lord
摘要
I thought I had a nice and comfortable life. Friends, family, even a girlfriend, but it seems life had other plans. All it took was one day for it all to come crashing down and my whole world turned upside down, in fact, I wasn't even in my world anymore, our whole class had been brought to another world and my days of hell and misery began.......until an angel, no, a demon appeared in front of me......
(P.S- I can't add it to my tags but this is a yandere romance along with the rest, there will also be MANY r18 and borderline r18 scenes including a msub and fdom dynamic)
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7評論
- 寫作品質
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寫檢討
Writing quality is very good, there was no mistakes at least for me as a nonnative English speaker. Also everything looks clear and comfortable to read. Updating stability is 1 chapter a day which is great, hopefully author will be able to keep it up for a long time. The story is great, it will be interesting to see how MC will deal with everything. It will be great if author can make auxiliary chapter where he can post character images and some basic info. Overall everything is great and I hope that author keep it up.
After reviewing the first chapter I can conclude that it's overall an OK chapter. First off, the Grammer is good for the most part, however, there are minor mistakes. I reccomended using grammarly to fix those. The story so far is slightly confusing and we don't get much background information and just dive into the story without even knowing who our main character is, which is the most important part of any novel. I can't say much about the story development etc because it's a very short read but I would reccomended working on your Grammar, creating a foundation for the story, creating a laid out character which we can follow, and also a better format of writing that has more descriptions and is written in a more realistic pace.
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Not worth reading yet. The mc has two paths before him one being Good and the other being Evil, the latter being much more interesting and if that's the path he takes I'm definitely interested. MC gets NTR'd in the first chapter and not knowing what he'll do in the future is kinda killing me since after it happened we get no perspective from anyone else involved
its very very good and yandere devlpoment is also good. just give more of lucy POV. . ,
Great so far the story is going right way. Grama is good I'm not native speker so far it's good I think. Best part we have yandere and it's not harem.