/ Games / I Dont want Power, I just want to Craft
摘要
Crafting is hella fun wanna join ?
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4評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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寫檢討
The story has a good plan "rich man plays for fun" I know that you only wrote 4 chapters but we need more of world bulding in real life and game I mean in real life what kind of pover has the mc Is he one of richiest man or not... You can also wrote somting about the pass of mc Just a litlle so we know how did he get so rich(we know that he did make a VR ) but somting more I read the another comment that charcatker dosen't have a description and i agrre with him Both looks and behavior And plesse write somting A last once per week
揭示劇透
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Great start and gives you what you ask for but the character developement in the game is a little off if you ask me I mean levelling up side jobs in games gives extra stats and buffs. But if you make that he will be the most powerful player with no actiall battle skills just base stats AKA a true OPMC. But im getting side tracked i think the inrro of the personal life of the mc needs more explenation and since also have played everything in the game he should know the short commings of each one and be able to make judgement base from that to make better items. Even if he doesn't enjoy hunting and other stuff force the MC to use his items to again make better weapons/equipments.
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