摘要
I was about to marry the most handsome, richest, and loving man in the whole world. But, on the day of our marriage, I suffered a fever.
A bullshit fever! A fever who destroyed my dreams! I wanted to shout that what I wished for is a ’forever...not a dengue feveeeeerrr!!!
Too bad, after I died, I found myself became a blood-sucking insect!!! Holy shit! Where's my beauty? My long legs? May fair skin? My newly rebond hair? My coca-cola body!!! Everything was gone.
I became an ugly mosquito. Cry!
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-- 推薦票
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6評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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寫檢討
Have to agree with the above review. The fish incident was pretty funny and though the plot and settings feel somewhat impossible, there is purpose behind the storytelling which makes it worthwhile. Ganbare!
Okay, this is hilarious! I find it a bit childish but it is worth continuing. First of all, I haven't read any reincarnation stories where a girl becomes a bizarre creature, so kudos to you for that. Then, every chapter has at least one comedy point which makes it really going. I hope you update it soon, I am definitely going to continue it. Now, it would have been great if you had detailed the FL's death a bit more, I don't know if you are planning to, later in the novel. And I think first person perspective suits this novel, so please don't change that. Rest is great, keep it up!
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Comedy is subjective. I personally didn't find it to be hilarious but I did have a few chuckles. Someone else may end up laughing their ass off while reading it. And so I would say this is a great start for a book that is supposedly trying to satire. The only thing I felt a bit off was the change of perspectives at times. In one para, the MC is being referred to as 'I' and then the next starts referring to her as 'she'. This kinda detracts from the reading. I'd suggest using some kind of scene break before it. Regardless, it's not too big of a problem and I think your book shows some promise. Keep writing!