/ Fantasy / I am in a new world, playing an offline RPG game
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Alex went to a new world with a game that he built in his previous life. In this new world, he could bring items from that game into real life. What can you say, it was a really exciting thing for him. He began to bring out those items from the games and he also became powerful that normal people won't be able to reach. But when he realized that he won't be able to use those powers because this was a completely normal world, he decided that he will stay low-key.
2 years after graduating from high school he decided he will go to Venus City for further study and complete a mission. But when he comes to the city his life will change. He will get to know that this is not your normal world like his previous world. He gets to know that many years ago portals suddenly appear in this world and monsters begin to come out from those portals. But at this moment humans also gain power and they are called fighters. Those fighters fight with those monsters. So, what will happen? Join his adventures to know more.
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Chapter 40, awesome book quite like it, fun story a kinda weird main character but i love the gaming factor and that the MC but it still has the flaw that the time it takes to complete missions is shorter then i think it should be but hey that's a minor thing, good book keep it up
I do like the book and I feel that it will get better but I do have a few qualms with it. First off the Grammer of the book can be very annoying at times and it can be hard to know what the author is trying to say or it's simply the grammar mistakes that make it very annoying. There are times where the author uses words way too many times and I hope that they try to mix it up or write it in a different way so that they don't have to keep using instantly all the time. A big thing that bothers me is when the author and Alex repeats the fact that going deeper in the forest is dangerous. We get it the forest is dangerous but I feel that it would be better to just say it once or twice but not constantly or show ways that the deeper parts of the forest is dangerous. Another thing is that it feels as if the world isn't entirely fleshed out and I hope that the author would take the time to expand the world a bit to give it life. It doesn't have to be huge but maybe get some background characters to talk about things or give small hints about the world around them and how it works. Also please give the other characters some more personality as I feel that they get a bit stale at times but that's just me. That is it from me, other then all of that I feel that the book is pretty amazing and I do enjoy reading it but the mistakes that I listed (Especially the grammar mistakes) make it hard to want to keep reading it. When I see the grammar mistakes I just feel annoyed by it to the point that I want to drop the book and that isn't what I want.
Too many repetitions & word count 😞 . useless missions .... who cares how he kills or how many he kills .... . fqer playing mobile games all day ... I don't want to know how or what he plays ... . I want to know about his real life .... why he is discarded or about his revenge or romance .... anything but mobile game word count . 😔 sigh**
Here’s the thing if you like a story where mc wears a mask and never reveals his abilities and live a life of weakling, then this story is for you.
it has potential to be a great novel but it's just too repetitive and the way the MC doing thing i would 100000% sure that he will do it after it was too late
It’s an okay read if you can get past the grammatical errors. The authors first language is not english so don’t expect perfection. An editor would be a great help. Book is good enough to pass the time.
Just a question to Author , does MC get revenge on his familly and the guy who acused him ? and if yes , what chapter ?
Wanna know about his world? Domt ask me I knew nothing too, NO WORLD BUILDING. How about Development? Nah Nothing to look forward to. Character Design? If u ask a 3 yr old kid to draw then thats characters in this book. Quality? Not even recyclable
Just improve your writing and stay with one POV also.. You need to learn some adjectives and your storytelling needs work.. Your characters are also bland
Reading this is triggering the grammar is horrendous and there’s no flow whatsoever
A stale novel , you really dont know what you read this novel for , nothing much going on , good concept but poor execution , author should've at least tried to pace the story appropriately , well he atleast put effort in writing those missions and stuff , but the plot is all over the place.
so it's an OK story, but there is no showing it's all telling like reading a journal. also what does the game character have to do with anything, why spam its stats, etc, every chapter. I know he gets items from the game via playing, and the stones increase his stats in rl, but the game character stats have nothing to do with real life or its skills, so why show it all the time. on chapter 52 now and the while drama about the family is getting annoying. if you want something to just scan read its okbutnot anything to get serious about there is just not enough to the story.
good story, good idea. but you use too many time " as you can see", or when you speak to the reader it's weird. thank you for the story, keep going [img=recommend] ( my english too is not good)
Pretty bad. Not that I could do better but it just feels cheap. Wants to be unknown but talks to a person who knows him without his mask. Trying to flirt? or be cool? or whatever? 2/3 of the book are him playing a game. Which has been written about in other books in an interesting way. Not here though :-(
Why doesn't he learn spiritual energy and fuse with stamina, making something similar to a chakra or name it as you like? Fuse the thing with mana, creating a new energy he can produce, and his better than mana, stamina, spiritual energy, combine. Please respond [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
A good novel they you should read. I like the concept of this novel. Even though I can see some grammatical mistakes, but I hope the author will edit them.
The story pace is uneven. Also there are many grammatical and spelling which in turn take the reader out of the story.
Hey guys, author here. English wasn't my first language. I am not that good at English. So, if you notice any mistakes, tell me about them, so that I can correct them. I hope you will like this novel. If you find any mistakes and also if you have any suggestions, please tell me. I hope you guyswill like this novel.