/ Book&Literature / High Human in Crossed Worlds - A HP x DxD Fic
摘要
Man dies. His last act in the previous life generates him an absurd amount of karma. He meets a god, and it reborns him in a crossworld of Harry Potter and DxD. He gets a gift, one that can only be fully explored with the knowledge that he learned in his previous profession in the previous world. The keeping of knowledge is also a gift. And with that, his karma is spent.
Thrown in the world with a 'good luck' and a slap in the back, he fights to survive until the start of canons.
The time until that, 1000 years.
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Yeah… Now read about some of his adventures in this crossed over world, beginning already in HP canon.
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English is not my main language, so you will find some strange stuff, like the mix of North American and the Queen’s English.
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Disclaimer: All characters that you recognize from the franchise of Harry Potter and DxD are propriety of its respective creators and I only wish that they were mine. But they are not. I only own the MC, the OCs, and the ideas that generated the non canon plot.
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The fanfic itself is good, the one writing is abit weird. He/she doesn't know when men of culture are making jokes. Author would reply them so seriously or sometimes felt offended by their jokes...I'm not used to it lol. Also, the author would keep saying it's his fanfic, his rules and won't reply to any nonsense comments. I get it, please don't flex your alpha mentality too much, I might go blind from it! All jokes aside, the fanfic is amazing. I just hope author can relax. Although there are many trolls in this site, many good people are here as well. 5 stars from me, goodluck on your jouney.
The fic itself is not bad, not my cup of tea but not bad. In the first few chapters, there are some minor spelling mistakes but nothing that makes the story unreadable. ("Ok them," instead of "OK then," in Chapter four) My main grievance is how wordy some parts of the story are, and how inappropriate some of the words used by certain characters are. Helena using "evolves" in Chapter one (Not something a 1010 Y/O Ghost should know) really hurts my soul in particular. (Could have used 'changes'?" I'm not a fan of the whole 'explaining of history' thing that goes on, it makes sense in regards to how you've crafted your fic but it is definitely too wordy. The verbal lashing the mc gives to Dumbles in Chapter Four is also too wordy. The Baron? or Fair? (Ghost) explaining the couple's history to the Weasely boys is also too wordy and has a few spelling mistakes. The readers don't need to be spoon-fed information. Orignal: "That person that the headmaster just addressed as 'my boy', is the husband of Selena Sally Ravenclaw, older twin of Helena Hela Ravenclaw, and daughter of Rowena Ravenclaw. His full name is Erik Runes Ravenclaw Lord of Ravenclaw and the Hogwarts castle. He married his wife, Selena when they were 20 year old. Today, he is 1010 years old. And the headmaster just called him 'my boy'." Less wordy: "The person who the headmaster just addressed as 'boy' is the husband of Selena Ravenclaw, twin sister of Helena Ravenclaw. His name is Erik Ravenclaw, and he's over one-thousand years old." (Not a paragraph of useless info.) There is no real need to include most of the information. Helena being Selena's twin implies that Rowena is her mother, no need to write that Rowena is her mother as "TWINS" should say enough about their relationship in one word. "Older" isn't necessary either, no one cares who the older twin is. Arguably it doesn't matter when you are 1010 years old. Including the Mc's full name is also unnecessary, he's lord Ravenclaw it's obvious his last name is Ravenclaw. Him being Lord Ravenclaw is literally yelled by the elf earlier in the chapter so it doesn't need to be mentioned a fifth time... Lord of Hogwarts (*Eyeroll*) obviously it's mentioned a lot and doesn't need to be included in every chapter, it also doesn't need to be mentioned to the students at Hogwarts, they are not your audience, your audience is your readers. Married at 20 Y/O is unnecessary, who cares when they were married? Him being called Lord Ravenclaw should also imply that he is married to Selene... Today he is 1010 years old... Using numbers instead of words is lazy, though I do it myself. This wordiness never ends and makes reading your fic painful. I don't need to be told every single bit of information, most of it should be inferred (Thought of or worked out by yourself) and not rammed into someone's brain via words. Writing is good because a majority of it is up to the imagination, if you are too specific or 'wordy' it makes it much harder to imagine what's happening. Dialogue between characters shouldn't be a paragraph long, do you let someone just stand there and belt a storm of words at your face for a minute? It just comes off as unnatural if you have a 90-word long speech as dialogue. I don't quite have a better way to convey the wordiness, maybe watch stand-up comedy and look at how trimmed their stories are? Comedians don't include useless information in their story's as that makes them un-palatable. Anything that should be guessed or implicitly understood shouldn't be so obviously stated in the story... Sorry if this is explained poorly, I don't know how to better put it into words. Feel free to message me or reply to this comment if you want to talk a bit about wordiness.
First of all the story is good with good english unlike the MTL translation that is seen on this site. Now the story starts in HP canon and the MC is already over 1000 years old and even though he has retained his previous memories but hadn't done anything about voldemort before the start of the canon. The MC is Lord Ravenclaw by marrying the twin sister of Helena Ravenclaw but knowing that voldemort will make a horcrux of the diadem still did nothing to stop it and let everything happen as canon. The first 60 chapters are more of a fix it canon than actual story of the MC which starts after 70 chapters. The author for some god forsaken reason wrote 8 chapters with Harry Potter pov about his entire school year seperately when the MC's school year finished in 3 chapters. Now the story is not bad itself as I wrote above but could have been better. Like writing the first chapter about his return to Hogwarts and then start his origin story and others such as intervention in the voldemort situation much before than shown here.
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Yeah I don't know why I haven't seen any reviews say this but the synopsis says he reincarnation 1000 years in the past but I'm on chapter 8 and no it starts 1992 and tages say weak to strong from what I can see no he's are ready strong. And I don't even know if he's reincarnated. From what I can guess from look at the titles of chapters is that he's going to do his things in hogwarts with flash backs whenever he feel like it . The synopsis is a lie it would have you believe that this story is about a person being reincarnated as a devil 1000 years before the story and going through his adventure till the main plot but no at the start of the story he are ready past all that is he reincarnated I don't know what devil how is he from I don't know was he even reborn as a devil because he was a hogwarts student when he was 11 I don't know why / how didn't he get his wifes I don't know . I don't know about you but I hate when the story just starts at a later point in a mc life and randomly tell you tidbit about his past especially why the synopsis would have you believe otherwise.
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I was confused most of the time i was reading. I mean I expected in the first chapter to read about the mc actually getting reincarnated. But no it starts off 1000 yrs after with his ghostly sister in law and no background information. Just here is the mc and his wives. Where is the harem building the romancing each woman?
It's good at the beginning when Erik is still the mc then the dxd canon cane and *PUFF* Erik became issei's plot armor and like every fanfiction, I read with issei on it the author is a simp for issei like issei this issei that, issei is not even a likable character but oh well author wants author do😒
all I can say is the edge, oh the edge, there is just so much edge. unfortunately, I am cut all over and have to tap out. eh, did they increase the character count?
An interesting story not about Harry Potter but about Rowling's world itself. Chapters are published every day. The characters are interesting and lively. The only downside is that there are only 10 chapters at the moment. Well, the chapters, as for me, are too small, I would like to be 1.5 / 2 times larger (well, it seems to me). I look forward to continuing.
This story starts out great however after a certain point about 140 chapters in, it stops following the MC and follows Rias and her peerage for like 30 chapters then when we finally get back to the MC he doesn't do anything anymore. People try to kill his family and he just pranks then and sends them on their way. He does nothing, and the characters seem fine with it. People try to kill his kids and he doesn't kill them, and his wives are fine with it? Also he does a lot of things (or doesn't do a lot of things) just so that the plot can continue as normally as possible for some reason.
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Another author who says they will be back in a day or 2 but doesn’t update for months on end and doesn’t respond to readers or say if they are on hiatus. Only giving 1 star due to ghosting.
Erik Runes Ravenclaw the mc name, ultra booriing start. Weird harem selectioon and not expanding much, no quality lemons. Weird choice of the start + mc doesnt know what is happening boring as ppluckk
What can be said about this authors story , compelling , beautiful, well crafted . The main character of Eric Ravenclaw slots into the potter verse seamlessly all the small details and backstorys bring this tale to the next level plus being a crossover story with the DxD universe they are blended seamlessly together. Definitely 5⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ in my opinion!!😎😎😎
Well, the plot was good but it has plot holes in it. Let's see in hp part, the basilisk killed a student 50 years ago and the ghosts didn't call out for the MC but as soon a few students are pertified they become desperete. Ironic, ain't it? Well if it comforts you a bit the novel is a nice read.
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Author has so far done an amazing job in having the work be somewhat realistic along with a very stable series of updates for putting out new chapters. Really really enjoy the hard work you’re doing bud, you got a fan in me for sure
It's a good write would definitely recommend the read. The only thing is that it's not for me. Maybe I'll come back to the book later but just from what I've read it is as I said but it just feels like a very slow drawn out nails on a chalkboard. Don't know why it's like that. Something I understand but not a fan of is the constant Dumbles bashing... yes I understand he's done multiple stupid things but just constant bashing is stupid and I hope you do a redemption arc for him cause let's face it he's messed up. Author seems like he has done his research into the world's background and well versed. As for the development of the story I'm not sure why but it just felt like it was dragging by like I was forcing myself even though it was good reading. Maybe it's just me right now and I might enjoy it later but as for now imma drop and maybe pick back up. And I think I remembered author stating that it wouldn't be a catch them all harem but that is just sad for all the ones he doesn't catch so MAN UP AND CATCH THEM ALL!
I like that your one of the few writers on this app that can write coherent sentences, but I can't enjoy this story since it's impossible for me to enjoy the MC since you went with the journey is over beginning, meaning I can't truly understand the MC and root for him in any meaning full way.
I am a big fan and can't wait to see where this goes. I recommend starting to read this after waiting for a couple more chapters are published tho as the first chapters are more background than anything else.
I'm being shameless here and giving my own story a review. At least it is not a 5 stars one because I know where it can get better. 4 stars in writing bcs english is not my main laguage, so I still strugle with the vocabulary 5 stars in stability bcs I pretend to realease one chapter per day, at 12h in the webnovel time 5 stars in development bcs I know where I'm going with the story and have a 'script' to get there 4 stars in character because I'm not very good at describing them 5 stars in world bcs is a mix between the sandboxes created by JKRowling and Ichiei Ishibumi, and their worlds are amazing