/ Book&Literature / Harry Potter: Toby and His Young Lady
摘要
Transmigrating into an eleven year boy raised by a single grandma is hard enough, but when it turns out that the grandma is actually a Dark Wizard from an old organisation, life becomes complicated. Join Toby as he protects the heiress of the organisation from the rest of the world.
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- 寫作品質
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Mc (Toby) is irrelevant. The story is bored. MC is pathetic. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]
clearly google translated, and the mc is so cringe its almost funny. .................................................................................
Really liking the story so far(11 chapters in), the actions are believable, fights are well written, characters have good motivations and their actions are backing those up. Keep up the good work!
After reading all the available chapters, we can safely say that the "main character" Toby is not needed in this story, he is an empty place in this story, this persnage does not cause any impressions, except as an indicative betta persanage. The story at the moment is tied around Alice from beginning to end. There are also not enough tags to determine the direction of this story. The story itself is very bland, there are no interesting and diverse events with Toby, he is like a faithful dog following the direction of events in Alice's circle, he is not even considered a person. The update rate is low.