/ Book&Literature / Harry Potter the Fifth House: Galegold(corrected and redone)
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Credit: Cadenadeaventuras. A fair amount is his work early on with little changes then I decided to do my own thing. I'm doing some major changes to the story overall. I take no credit for his work. Keep in mind that my MC is obscenely smart in comparison to original. I do not own Harry Potter.
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Good book, bad MC The grammar is fine and the idea is good, but what takes the novel down is the worldbuilding and MC. World building: has too strong magic for a wand so he can automatically do windless magic, the fifth house is a new concept for me but it’s poorly executed in this novel and too good/OP compared to the other. The reason for them not knowing why the house was there was rushed and poorly thought out aswell. MC: The mc was a baby for 1000 that got his knowledge though some family magic, he has a superiority complex were he looks down on everyone in the story like Ron, Harry, Malfoy and every teacher it feels like. It get annoying real quick that he doesn’t try to get to know them but just judges them even when they are nice. He doesn’t show any basic respect for anyone even when they are nice to him and is like “yeah you would probably do something for your ‘greater good’” even when he just wants to know some basic knowledge that is pretty relevant for the future. So overall he just feels like a kid Malfoy that can do wandless magic and comes from a even better family.
Thank you for editing this book it’s an interesting read No offense to the original author but the names and grammar was all over the place This one’s grammar is good and names are consistent and right
Amazing concept, well written and overall a good fan-fic. Now all I need is more updates and chapters. Hope that this novel doesn't get dropped. That's all
one of the better ones I've read and I'll continue to read until I they give up or finish the book 📖😔
Thank you for making one of my favorite stories more enjoyable to read than the original and no fence to the real author of the original story.
# HAREM, Are you going to keep the harem, or are you going to do like the author and exclude the harem as the story goes on, to make your life easier?[img=proud]