/ Book&Literature / Harry Potter: outlier
摘要
a boy reborn in Harry Potter with a perk
there will be consequences
just trying to write something
don't mind me
work in progress
if you find any plot holes or inconsistencies, let me know
DISCLAIMER:
I am too bad of a writer to depict my imagination accurately so this is what you get.
The start is also not my best work, but it will get better.
Of course I don't own anything ohter than my OC's
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I really like the story so far. Him being natural legimens is exciting and refreshing, not to mention really cool. I won't comment on the grammar, because english isn't my first language. However i'am totally satisfied. There are no useless sentences or unreadable nonsense as of yet. I'am however only 5 chapters in. So i have to wait and see. In my opinion the Author is doing a great job and i'am excited to see more😊
Well it's AU so I can't say that many things in this story are wrong but occlumency is kinda hard and kids can't really practice that at 11 years old.....and there's a bit more inconsistencies according to the hp lore but it's AU so it's alrightMc uses his legilimens ability to manipulate people and lay low for now so if you like Mc like this....it's for you I guessNothing crazy but a good read nonetheless :)
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Bro the story has a lot of loop holes from the beginning and there are things that are not like in harry potter. yes natural legilimence is a thing but they cannot change or control others emotions from the get go they have to study mind art first to some high degree to even start changing an emotion tho they can put a thought in others mind before learning mind arts. As for finding out that he is a wizard the MC should have known it is called accidental magic for a reason.
Keep going padwan. Love the story. No Harem. Lucas x Holly.... I guess or maybe Tracy :I I am just filling up characters Just don't do Harem. Pls pls pls
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If your interested what the story is about its about a guy ego gets reincarnated at the same age as potter the world is AU and potter family is still alive and he has a twin sister everyone is more powerful and smarter just so you know. The mc is natural mind reader unlockes his magic at age of 5 with being able to sense emotions passively eithout entering there mind he is from a muggle family as for mc knowledge he knows harry potter plot but as i said this is a AU where everything is stronger i wont go into details but its not as easy to take down the troll as it was in the original mc is fine he doesn’t meddle with harry and is sister does his things lesrns new magic uses mind control for few chapters when he became colder the reasons you got to read to find out it is a good read only if there was more chapters lol
I liked the story, so far nothing much has happened, but with the climate that is being created it is possible to notice that there will be a very dark touch in the future. The main character so far does not care about the feelings of those around him, in addition to his mother. I believe that due to the possibilities of future directions of history, it is worth reading and following.
Compare to other shitty HP fanfictions this is gold. But author you need to update more chapters or else I will find you and I will hurt you.
One of the most unique hp fanfics there are. The mc is born as a natural legillemens great character depth and development. On the latest chap rn his abilities are starting to become similar to charles xavier at this point
is good if you look past some of the spelling mistakes and some plot hols that feel of in the beginning, but after 12 chapters, it becomes very good and follows a good story line and how every thing blends in together the older he becomes he not to OP he is human that struggles with his own things and some questionable behavior but it gives the MC plot and makes it interesting to learn how he handles the relationships around him
A wonderful fan fiction with a very unique combination of premises. Very emotionally charged and can feel the tensions playing against Lucas. Can’t wait to find out about certain characters’ mysteries!
you need to work on your dialogue and plot in general. this just reads: generic edgelord protagonist has no morals or personal boundaries and oh yeah every character is flatter than a cutting board personality wise because author can't be bothered to actually write THEM instead of just what they do. Mc befriends Hermione by manipulating her emotions ffs. what do we even know about the mc or his mother? what real interactions has he had? all you've done is write what happens, not how your character actually reacts or interacts with the world. no substance.
This is an absolute gem, sadly the updates are rather slow (But no pressure). Now changed to 5/5. The updates are still rather slow but when I see there is a new chapter I get excited which I can't say for a lot of different fanfics.
It is very well written and incredibly addictive. the story links up extremely well and each chapter feels like an important part of the story and not just some words put to fill up the word count
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