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the story is great but it's been ten days since it updated and I'm worried it will be left on a cliff hanger
Listen to me brother the story is really really good. so keep it up but if you update it so slow, then can I please burrow this story form you cuz I really want to write it with my own style
There's no point in giving this fanfic a proper review - it's bad in every possible way. Bad grammar, it's au story, bad system implementation, chinese worldview, missing content, incorrect skill names - don't read it.
Great premise but you have a few things you need to work on and go back through your previous chapters. Firstly your gimmick the blind box was supposed to be daily? but it isn't incorporated well into your story. The plot around the vole is kind of haphazard and doesn't really read well. The Alternate Universe of adding the magic phone makes the world feel like its in modern time but falls flat on the Harry Potter plot due to it being out of its time. Frequently in the story it reads like rough draft for your story. I would recommend and editor of some kind.
the story development and concept is very good it's mind blowing and a very new concept but the growth of the main character is lacking he has the okatsuki bloodline but he act like he is very lonely he has a sharingan but Sims for a girl. we all know the sharing gone he was only after intense hatred but he has The Mangekyō Sharingan but still is simping after a girl. we all know female lead is important but just kind of lead which is just force and misleading is not good for the future development of the novel you should just let it be a revenge arc against the girl family or face slapping. it's a good concept but I am not reading it furt her because is too much of a MC being a SIMP and has to many plot holes
Good novel but Is this Translation If this novel is translated, what is the Chinese name?؟؟ 0?????????????????} ^} ^{<] <] ^} >{<{>{>} ^\>;<;>\^\^÷><;>÷>÷<®]
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I can't say anything specific about quality and such but the idea and the plot of this story are just mind blowing. Man I am loving this one and would request the author not to drop it.