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Harem System: Spending Money On Women For 100% Rebate!
3.94 (41 評分)
摘要
[Ding!]
[Cashback System Activation Requirement Met!]
[System Binding In Progress...!]
[System Successfully Linked!]
[Spent $1,000. 10x Critical Hit. Earned $10,000. The money has been transferred to account XXX-XXX-XXX]
[Spent at least $1,000 on a beautiful lady. Received 1 lottery ticket. Do you want to use it?]
[YES][NO]
Kyle was a man that has never had any luck in life and he was on the verge of ending it all after being fired from his minimum wage job due to a customer's complaint which turned out to be a lie but due to the customer being an attractive lady, no one believed Kyle.
To make matters worse, he had to pay for the damages that was caused by the customer.
Beautiful people, they had it easy, didn't they?
This was his last step and he knew that he wouldn't see tomorrow as he searched for a river to throw himself in.
He thought his mind finally broke as there was no explanation for the Cyan Screen that popped up as he clicked the [YES] button.
[You have drawn Charm!]
[Charm: There is nothing the user can't charm his way out of or into! The universe has blessed you with charisma!]
"Hahaha! I must have lost my marbles..." Kyle muttered to himself but his phone soon rang out to show that he had a notification.
And to his surprise, he saw $10,000 sitting in his account and his jaw dropped.
"THIS IS FOR REAL!!!"
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I am utterly appalled by the recent developments in this novel. After reading up to chapter 81, I couldn't even finish chapter 82 before giving up in sheer disgust. The introduction of NTR and the MC's despicable actions in destroying a happily married couple with a young child is absolutely repulsive. I had initially hoped the author would refrain from turning the MC into a homewrecker, but instead, they chose to have him meticulously manipulate and seduce the married woman into an affair. To make matters worse, the story expects readers to root for this detestable character. This is a clear indication of the author's complete lack of a moral compass. If you're going to include such reprehensible content, at least have the decency to put an NTR tag on your book! I am thoroughly disgusted and have decided to drop this novel immediately. The MC is truly despicable, and such a character deserves nothing less than a fitting demise in any other story.
This story is as silly as Looney Tunes, but without the charisma of Daffy Duck or Bugs Bunny. Author, you really should've set this an alternate Earth or something because the way you write the characters and "Los Angeles" makes it painfully obvious that you aren't from the US... Like, it's so obvious and just plain ridiculous that it's immersion breaking... Or at least I hope you aren't from America because if you are then you really need to go outside and touch some grass instead of observing the world through the news and Reddit.
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your below average novel a average man who get a system and remain average the character design is trash the female characters are even more of trash I don't even know are people even pass 10 chapter and the mc is kind of stupid.
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So it’s mostly the little things that make this subpar to terrible. California is a state not a city, and it’s really big with lots of differences across it. If you mean the L.A./Hollywood area as a caricature fine, BUT it does not rain there. The whole point of the area is it has no weather. Cops in the U. S. can get away with lots of stuff, but making a person transfer money out of electronic banking, nope. The setting makes the story less believable not more. It’s like saying all Midwest farming is rice paddies. Unless it’s addressed why culture mashing is happening, it’s just makes the story ungrounded.
reviewing after 31 chaps.I really loved this. I'm ok with netori and all but the landlord is good to the mc. so i hope he won't duck the landlady. or you can just make the landlord bad hehehe🤭🤭
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Man, if you don't want non-privileged readers to stop following your novel, just post an announcement. It's been around a week and with more than 20 chapters since you didn't post a chapter for non-privileged readers
I love it! I want more of it! I have some reservations about certain scenes but after seeing your replies to other comments. I will trust the process and trust you
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I like the concept, and the writing is good. I will look forward to seeing how this novel goes. Keep up the excellent work, and most importantly, write a story you like.
I like the flow of this book I’ve unlocked every chapter and want lots more. Still I want more smut in the book please :)
It was good enough in the early chapters but when you got into the locked ones the quality dropped drastically. Spelling and grammatical mistakes, characters acting totally unlike themselves to suit the plot, and major gaping plot holes. It seems like author needs a proofreader of some kind. Thats objective flaws with the quality of the writing. The more personal issues I have is that the story went in a very very odd direction in terms of plot. Almost changed genres and not in a good way, and by the end theres no major character growth he just says “alls well that ends well”. And another thing, I know we write what we know and the author is free to express themselves and who they are in their writing, but Im not a fan of shoving current events and social crap into the books, I want to come her and forget the flaws in our world not have them shoved in my face in heavy handed self congratulatory remarks. I thought it had potential, I was thoroughly disappointed.
Just caught up to the latest free chapter. Very nice concept that I haven't seen much of. I quite enjoy the characters/story so far. intrigued to see how the story unfolds.
I think you writing level is good, the story has potential. What I would say is usually in rebate or novels like this we see MC get rich and then progress in life. Here he got money but he so scared that he didn't even buy house. He could buy a house in the girl name for big rebate. Like he can buy a building and construct a pub, but having other assets is a risk? I hope this points out the issue, I would prefer if you could stop this again and again with government threat of having them on his back.. he drives a good car own a building and bought a Lamborghini for a girl but can't buy assets for himself. This logic is a little half based. Also he got good memory skill so he can study again (like you mention in the start what he was thinking to do) here you can add a college part and younger women. (I have read till ch 71, would keep reading but this stuff pointed above annoys me a little. Please try to change it)
So much nonsense How can someone threaten a rich man who has half a billion dollars The hero can simply hire a bodyguard How can a worthless person kidnap his girlfriend I felt myself that the hero is not safe enough and the hero did not feel anything?And the hero remained like this with a bank account worths half a billion dollars without even a single bodyguard for him or his friends.
I never thought I would find myself reading into a novel of this genre. But the storyline is fairly good, characters are interesting, and it's not totally focused on smut once you start reading into it. Character development takes awhile to get to but it's growing.
Your novel is simply brilliant.. i love the calming effect it has on me and the good wordings and steady buildup. Brilliant!!
Enjoying the book so far and plan to continue reading. My only qualm is the Mrs Jones plotline as I’m not really sure where that’s going. Since she has featured heavily up to now but has a husband and children I’m concerned this is going to change from a harem novel into a share/open-relationship story. Hopefully that’s not the case and I t doesn’t end with her not being exclusive to the MC. But to reiterate I’m enjoying the story for the most part and I’ll continue with it.
This is my first rebate story so go easy on me and also let me know the kind of rebate stories you would like in the future under here. This way I can create more books around rebate stories just for you. I will choose the one with the most likes!