/ Fantasy / Grymuar Kingdom
摘要
The day was sunny, and the peasants were just finishing building a new granary. Aron watched the progress proudly from the tower window. Nothing could have spoiled such a beautiful day for him.
[New mission!]
[...time, I really thought that I would be bored to death. Once I even started counting how many pages I have and you know what? They are countless! But a mortal like you don't...] [Reward for completing the quest: 5 iron knights]
Aron's face was disgusted. In his head, he was preparing for the worst.
[Time to complete the mission: 1 day]
[Penalty for not completing the mission: you will lose your left leg]
Aron stared in amazement at the new assignment. He used to know an old man without one leg who was doing quite well. "Ehhhh, I must come to terms with living without a leg because I have no idea what to do in this task."
_______________________________________________
This is my first novella and English is my second language.
I'm writing for fun, and I take inspiration from many other novels ;)
標籤
-- 推薦票
榜單 
-- 推薦票 你也許也喜歡
8評論
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
與他人分享您的想法
寫檢討
This book has some serious potential, I couldn't put it down once I started reading it. The only problem is the writing quality. This book is awesome, and once it's fixed it'll be a gem.
The Novel is very interesting, waiting for next chapters. I like that there is included the village building, and hope for more of that content.
My brother asked me, so here I am. :DDDDDD So far, not many chapters to say anything. Editor definitely could be helpful here. Story is rather slow yet interesting.
The novel is good and has potential. Worldbuilding is good and the development of the story is interesting. The writing quality is good and the author, you can do it. Fighting!!
The premise is great,the plot has great potential,do work on the world building and quality of writing,as this is a common problem we,novice authors face,once you sharpen your writing skills ,none can stop your novel from shining
The story is quite an interesting one with all the details of knights, poverty, training, and so on. I like it till now[img=recommend][img=recommend] A thing that I hated tho, is that starting from chapter two, some paragraphs just became too long for me to read. Other than that, the novel seem good.[img=recommend]
The writing needs some work but the story has potential, and I would love to read more.
Definitely needs an editor. But it is good novel. There are knights so I like it hehehe If you correct your grammar this novel will have potential.