摘要
Kaius is in America’s strongest fighting force known as a navy seals. He died while saving multiple family’s in the kill zone. Kaius here’s a voice whose there brave one I am the god of war I was impressed by your actions so now you have the honor to be reincarnated by the strongest god there is, I’ll give you 5 wishes brave one.
Based off the 300 movie.
Your author here just want to let y’all know this is my first story and I’m knew to writing in general so work with me if anyone has suggestions let me know and I WILL MAKE ERRORS please don’t hate me XD we will get though them together!!!
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3.8
- 寫作品質
- 更新的穩定性
- 故事發展
- 人物形象設計
- 世界背景
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Writing Quality : 3/5 Stability of Updates : 4/5 Story Development : 3/5 Character Design : 3/5 World Background : 4/5 The main problem is not the grammar but the way the author has written the story . I'm not a native speaker but I can tell that I've read many stories and some of them have a proper way of writting and others ... It's not a bad thing, the author worked hard and tried but I would suggest reading official novels to have a reference point on the dialogues.
I came into this on the assumption that it would be about a guy who was able to summon Spartans and a system around that Idea. instead we have your basic dude whi will automatically become a master of combat along will the warriors from for honor who put into a realistic setting become the equivalent of what lu bu from the the three kingdoms was said to be like in battle and to top it all off the mc goes for the basic wishes that every tom and harry does.
It has great potential and great imagination. Can't wait to read more. I hope you as the author can slow the pace a little and focus on world/story/background building. I think the biggest mistake many authors make is a to fast pace of a story, little to no time for character development. But I enjoy read both your stories on web novel and hope you continue to write.
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Writing quality: 2 stars - Just read the synopsis and you will understand. Grammer is abyssmal and reading becomes more painful than it should be. Stability of updates: 3 stars - look at chapter list to see update frequency, its sporattic. sometimes with a gap of a day, other times with a gap of 2 weeks. Story dev: 3 stars - idea is interesting, execution not so much. Author has a good imagination, but not the best literary skill. Character design/world backgroud: 2 star - hard to understand and not really built up. 2 stars becasue its a fanfic and people have a frame of reference from canon. Otherwise, not much is built up here. Overall: 2.4 - not recommended for someone new. Only if you are a literary masochist who is used to terrible grammer and botched writing.
A great fanfic. Has really big potential, but has some flows, like missing comas and dots. I really recommend
It improves the quality of the writing a little more. Story development is very fast safe a bit to have more chapters, the way it is I think it will end up in 40~65 chapters and you won't have any more ideas for your book story. Character design is ok but if you improve the mc it will be much better. Background of the world; I feel like something's missing but I don't know how to tell you author.
meh. Pretty Average, i am not complaining tho. just that it feels like our mc is going to be speed running through this 3 stars is max i can give to this
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