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摘要
A soul traversed through dimension and realm, to arrive in the world of Teyvat. There, the soul finds a perfect body, or to the souls previous knowledge, a Soul-bearing puppet, which had the appearances of a certain character he had seen within a game called Genshin Impact.
Upon possessing the said body and awakened. He now has to figure out what he should do onwards to not have a big impact on the story, after all, he is an existence that wasn’t a part of the game he had played, his presence may mean changes to the story line that he was familiar with.
But with the help of a certain system, he will live in this world without any regrets. Perhaps even finding happiness in this life.
A/N I don’t own anything but the character idea!
Cover artist: KuroiDa
Search for: [ Render ] Barbara - Genshin Impact by ShuyuNova on DeviantArt
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Shameless author here please leave an review and it will motivate me more! Gives me feedback to what I can improve! Thanks for reading!
very good story the only problems I have it's that the dialog is a little lacking and it's a little to fast paste which makes it seem worse if the dialog and interactions had a little more depth to it as well as a little more charecter development/depth like how did he meet them and what's the story that allowed him to get close to them all ect act plenty of stories apart this way and have flash backs or indepth dialog about this but the lack of/fast pace of the dialog and story as a whole makes the whole interactions with the cast seemed rushed or forced tldr story's very good just the pacing and dialog with the lack of some detail is the problem also ~oni chan --->
Author here, I’m thinking of rewriting the whole thing because it feels so disastrous
Great Fanfic , tho occcasional grammar mistakes and slow updates it's still great since writing is your hobby [img=recommend]
It has a good start and premise though i would have recommend that you actually show us the main character meeting and interacting with the genshin cast as simply telling us doesn't really sell the idea of them being friends. How is he friends with them? How do they interact? What kind of relationship to they have? These are the things that should be shown naturally and not just "oh they are friends". After that, then you can have some timeskip.
Its a great wtart and has a lot of potential .....pls keep updating regularly i just hate it when a work is going on so well and suddunly the author gets bored of it and leaves it
The story is developing well, but the author needs more confidence to continue working, and I would also like the size of the chapter to be larger. And so everything is very good.