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With wide-eyed eyes I watched the scene as the man tried to steal some booze in a test tube. But that wasn't the most surprising thing.
The vendor, noticing the theft, jumped up from his seat and raised his wand to send a fireball at the hapless thief.
My expression became even more puzzled when he saw it. I fell to my knees, struggling to contain my hysteria over the absurdity of what was happening.
"What am I going to do... I'm going to die at the first poke..."
But suddenly the expression on my face slowly became normal, even enthusiastic. All because of the voice in my head, which was my salvation.
[The system welcomes you. Do you want to make a contract?]
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As always, I would remind everyone that star rating can't rate everything about novel. So don't mind the star rating I give. Anyway, I reach 3rd chapter and I don't think I can continue. First, author should know that it's "chapter" instead of "charapter". The title spelling is wrong and I feel sad that none of reader help reminding author and help author improve/fix his mistake. Secondly, the sentence is readable(have alot of space to improve in term of grammar, not saying I'm good in English myself but I can still see that author is a bit beginner in English. Keep it up, you can definitely improve.👍) but the symbol. The dialogue is weird because of symbol and a bit disconnected. Like you can't feel the dialogue flow, the dynamic. Maybe because author rush it a bit. Slow down, explore more(Reveal character appearance description at least.). Thirdly, the system itself. It kind of just vague with little explanation. Maybe author could read some other system type novel and see how they introduce the system. You got it right, only a bit vague that kind of like blur image. I wish you well and your story enter ranking. Its not my cup of tea but I hope you keep writing. Maybe someday... 👍👍
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so far so good but I have a question any romance?[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
you skipped more than half of the things from the ca to a+ in adventurer rank it just started and now you throw it elsewhere you had like 50 chapters for the dungeon arc and the giant plant fight, a half story I would say, I didn't see in no chapter do you directly skip it, they met at the end of the chapter and the next they are friends, the subject of transmigration or reincarnation is a secret that nobody would take it easy as you put it in the chapter, well that's it all thanks for the chapters
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Sangat di sayangkan MC cuma ngikutin artur doang ,dari sudut pandang pembaca MC gak guna lagi pula dia tau sebagaian cerita, Sebenernya itu MC dapet sistem apaan coba Lama banget buat naik level Max level MC 10 doang??
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good read 4.8 stars.......for now......................................................................................................................................................................................
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Shameless review from the author. Give this novel the stones of power please, I would appreciate it...............................................