Evolving My Undead Legion In A Game-Like World

This story has potential to be great. The world building is better than most stories on this app while leaving some questions about the true nature of the world. However, I am pretty disappointed in the free chapters of the story. There was too much exposition in places where it was inappropriate, such as right before or after battles. The size of chapters are pretty short too, which means the majority of the chapter is filled with lots of information that doesn’t really matter at the moment. The author had a chance to show us the world that awakeners enter, showing us struggle, mistakes, and ultimately triumph. Instead we get two fights with some slimes and then a couple more monsters are quickly killed of screen before he goes back home. I get that the first volume was supposed to be slow, but it felt like almost nothing important happened. We still know nothing of his skills or talent. I can’t see myself coming back to spend money on this story if it stays like this.

A very good and planned book with excellent writing quality, however it is very slow paced, which is good in the beginning to get an understanding of what the book is about, but what is crazy and hilarious about the book, is that the author clearly stated that the book would be more fast paced after chapter 50, and I can say there is no difference at all it has been 100 chapters and it has been four days in the book, it is pretty crazy in my world, and I feel that the author over describes somethings in the novel, I'm wondering if when it's been 10 days in the book, we've reached chapter 500???? But if you enjoy a slow-paced book with a lot of information about everything, I recommend this one for you. I'm sorry but i drop here maybe will comeback to read it on a site that has it free.....

I really, really like this novel and think it has incredible potential but it also has a pretty glaring problem that's seriously hurting it for many people. One of its biggest flaws is that something that could be easily and succinctly done in 2 chapters is more often than not stretched out to encompass at least 5 or more chapters by the author using filler, for seemingly no reason but to artificially slow things down. Combine that with the extreme over explanations of things that either don't need to be explicitly explained for one reason or another for the audience to naturally understand it, or are about things that feel misplaced and aren't relevant to that moment, the short term plot, near future or even overall story for a long time to come but is explained in excruciating detail anyway right then and there, putting the whole plot and story on hold until the info dump is over, many times happening several times a chapter and often repeating the same exact info just one or two chapters later without changing anything about it, just a complete copy/paste from before. Further add on the seemingly endless (and mostly off topic) tangents he goes into before, during and after he does anything at all, but especially especially so for fights, meaning he'll need several chapters to kill a low level mob (like a slime) because he's spends so much time on random superfluous tangents that 90% of the buildup and aftermath is just the MC yapping about nothing and repeating the same thoughts and reflections he's already had many times so far, without actually learning from these reflections and needing to go through the same thought processes over again to relearn the conclusion you already came to multiple times before, repeating the steps every 10 chapters or so. Plus the stats and descriptions of things are very often repeated multiple chapters in a row without changing anything, leading to between 30%-40% of a chapter can relatively often be nothing but the same info said in the previous chapter(s), and with the size of each chapter it only feels that much shorter with all the filler and repeats. It kinda feels like if you were to reedit the novel and it's chapters, you could probably remove around 40% of the words and reader would still have the same amount of info and knowledge of the world, the plot and the MC as you would get reading the original novel, only with less filler and faster/(debatably)better pacing Don't get me wrong though because i truly do like this and i know this makes it sound really bad but i do strongly believe others should give it a chance and try it for themselves, i just want it to improve, get better and eventually become one of the all time goats of a story (like "the second coming of gluttony" for example) like it so clearly has the potential to be if its a bit more edited and trimmed down.

This a story where a select few gain special powers in the form of a simple system style progression. If you're looking for a story that the MC carefully plans and optimizes his powers then look else where. The world doesn't allow have any structured learning for awakeners until you're level 26 or rank 2(the ranking and level systems are very confusing.) Its basically a free-for-all and no hand holding when people awaken. The only information is asking random power users question or a restricted forum (basically trying to get all of your knowledge from reddit.) Opportunities are constantly missed from the get go. For example, the only way to dual class is getting a life seed before you awaken but they don't tell you until after you awaken. So besides all of that, the story is engaging and it does tell an interesting tale about an MC with imperfect and human traits powering through with an OP talent.