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In the grand world of Nova, many different races exist such as elves, humans, dwarves and beastmen and through years of war, strife and competition the world has grown, becoming home to great empires and countries throughout the oceans and five continents. However, to the great creators the world has become stagnant and boring, ever since the calamity that was the Church of Light and their Holy White empire.
Now the Dark God has created a new race after years upon years of dedicated effort. A species that is like none other and his hope for Nova’s future….Dungeon cores, beings that have the ability to reshape the very world itself, entering the domain of the gods.
Join Frost a newly born first generation Dungeon core as he embarks upon his journey within Nova and carves out his place in the world. How will the world’s current denizens react to his birth? Will they be friends or foes? And most of all how the Light God react to this new addition to the world, will he accept them or seek to destroy them?
This novel incorporates dungeon building and management but most of that won't fully take off until the later volumes when Frost has much more floors and money to play around with. This is not a solely dungeon story as the MC Frost will have to explore and interact with the world of Nova much like how an adventurer would and forewarning the story is slow. There's a lot of details and avenues which the story goes into, not simply battles, wars and action, it follows all aspects of Frost's life, his growth and interactions with Nova not only as a Dungeon core but also as a person.
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I like the story and the plot I just hate the story development because it’s TAKING VERY VERY LONG im currently in chapter 160 I think and only one month has passed in the story which can tell a lot because I recently read another novel which at around chap 160 I mostly think that this is taking so long because the author adds MANY Unnecessary details such as (this is a small spoiler) for anyone that likes that story when you get to the part where mc (frost) assist Leo in his fight with his uncle when the attack starts you can skip the next 15 chapters which would be a total waste of time and many other parts where author just spends 3-5 chapters just explaining minor details
It's a great story, and I'm only not reading it anymore because of personal preference. I just didn't like maya's character, not that she's bad or anything, she was decently well made. I just came here more for the dungeon master, and way less for the romance that felt slightly forced.
I've read up to chapter 125 so I'll be honest in my opinion. I really like your idea for your story, but as well as having good successes, there are also mistakes. Mainly in grammar and continuity Example: in one chapter there was a character who clicked his tongue 5 times and the sighs: (Haaaaaa) seem like screams. It is very obvious that the author knows many Japanese, Korean and Chinese novels and brought some of his strengths to the novel, but he also brought his weaknesses like the personality of his protagonist.
(chap.49) I am giving an honest review before I drop this story. I don't really know if you have a lot of mistakes in writing b/c my brain just makes it right for me if it isn't to bad, so you get a 5-star for decent writing. Stability of updates, well I found this when it had like 300 chapters already, so you get a 5-star for having a lot of chapters. Story Development....one word, slow, I could see if you wanted to start it off slow and let the reader get used to the dungeon system chakra ect but after chapter 40 I began seeing that this story would probably never speed up, my main reason for dropping, but you get a 3-star b/c I saw the effort at least, just too many unnecessary details, chapters, ect. Character Design, I have only seen what like 16 people, two adventure groups, bandit group + knight, Frost(mc) Maya(mc protector) Dark(god) Light(god) and like 3 other people, and I swear the adventurer group(first one) had more personality than the mc, they were just more fun(to me at least), Maya, I can't really say anything about her, she does nothing, she gets mad sometimes and gets embarrassed sometimes, that's it. Dark/Light god, don't really know anything about them, but that is okay for now, considering that they are gods, and Dark god so far is actually pretty decent. Maybe it was b/c I'm at chapter 49, but I would say take some time to get the main people of the story more depth and personality, I would give you a 2-star but since your a new author I will cut you some slack and give you a 3-star. World Background, something that can make or break your story, this is how I see it, you introduce us to this world that is suppose to be huge many species called Nova, then a few chapters later you dump us with information about where the mc is located all in one chapter and you basically don't really go over it again, at least up till chapter 49, all I really remember was he was in a mountain that had strong monsters the deeper you went, I honestly debated if I should have given you one star for World Background, but I went ahead and gave you a two since you did at least explain it in one chapter and went over albeit very little in later chapters. Don't get the wrong idea, I like the idea of your story and maybe I'll come back and read sometimes b/c at the end of things my entire life is reading, that's what I do for hours upon hours, and your story has a lot of potential, every story does, so keep working hard or don't really your choice, this is like my first real review of a story, so it's a bit long, but hope the authors sees this and tells me if it gets better later on.
Like others have said the author includes WAY too many unnecessary details wasting time and basically reducing the length of each chapter in terms of actual things happening the random 'romance' also is just more annoying than anything it's not done in a nice way or a funny way most of the time it's just to be perverted for no other reason and this happens a LOT if there's any female or male character together there's a high chance it will happen which adds in a lot of basically filler also I've read quite a bit of this and maya's defining trait is... alcoholic and that's mostly it also explain why minor spoiler that two I believe rank c adventurers were teaching frost better than Maya was teaching him and Maya and frost also don't have any real chemistry and I mentioned it slightly before but the filler is heavily out of control and is seen in a lot of chapters overall it's not bad but it needs much more work and I hope I'll find it later on in the story
Great story really! Though I have a few major flaws to point out! First is plot development! It's too slow! Like super duper slow. Author created a very big world yet the story development is super slow! It would get boring as time goes by since nothing exciting comes up! I dont have that much patience to keep reading about irrelevant minor stuffs. Second is MC's personality. It's Childish! I mean if author wants to make it something funnier with this Childish MC then it's not working, Annoying even. Now for the good parts of the story! First is the uniqueness of the story! You can rarely see an NPC with Ice Magic! Or his dungeon is frozen themed! Always fire, undead, darkness, the usual edgy stuff! His main weapon isnt even a sword! Plus points with that! Second Grammar! There's no noticeable flaws in the writing! One of the many flaws that authors have and never even improve on it! But this! For a first novel you did well! Now! Although you have this good points, the flaws I listed will weigh more on why people stop reading, most people dont have that much of time to be patient. Goodluck!
I just finished the chapters that are available to read and the book is well written and presented the author try to give you vibe that you and the main character will see and understand the world and powers together there have been some bits that are confusing but you get a after some time I wish I could tell people more about this book but there is just 8 chapters is there is not that information to talk about thanks to author for writing a good and interesting book
Got through 20 chapters and could no longer handle it Amazing premise, far too slow for my tastes. Example: it takes the first 150 chapters for in world time to pass. The female fenrir named maya is an insufferable character and forced romance makes it all the more worse. She is cruel to the mc, who up until chapter 20 is barely 36 hours old. She is lazy and incompetent as a guardian. skills and strength she has in spades, but only uses it to traumatize and nearly kill the mc. The story clearly states at one point that if one misstep was made during a “training (misspelled from purposeful torture)” session, he would have died. It’s genuinely sad to me that a character that is only 20 chapters old is the whole reason I have to drop the book. I’m well aware this sounds like a hate review but without that character I would have read every chapter and kept up with the book. Some characters just kill books.
The MC ist the Son of GOD and his Character is like: An Idiot and that nearly kills himself in the first 10 chapters. An Coward who fears his Guardian who is half his size (don´t forget he is the SON OF GOD) and lets command himself arount by HIS HELPER. Why make the MC SON OF GOD if you want to tell the Story of a standart Loser
my main issue is that there's too much detail and spends about 2 chapters in the dungeon not using it very well and then 75 chapters outside the dungeon and complaining about issues that could be easily solved if he used the dungeon more instead of like a training for 2 minutes or something and actually made progress in it.
This novel is a work of art. Your writing is beautiful, thought-provoking, and just a nail bitting experience keepingypu waiting for what's next.You put your whole heart into what you write, which I love. The content you publish is just awe-inspiring and addictive I can't wait for more
Writing this at the 470+ chapter mark The overall story is amazing and I see a lot of potential when it comes to world building and the overaching story. one minor problem is slow story development but currently it's bearable and at the current pace, I see this novel going over the 1000 chapter mark before it ends.
I know this question is dumb but Why would he need to grow as a person when 'he's' a dungeon core? It's like asking a donkey to become a better lion😅. Also that paragraph that supposed to be hyping the story always crack me up, I mean "Evil gods introduced new species that have the ability to change the world! will the so called righteous god allow? or nah?" or something so obvious like this🤣
I don't do this often, actually I never did this, but I'm going to write a second review. My previous review ended with me dropping the beginning of chap 49, and I feel I was being a bit too biased because that day wasn't that great for me, let me just jump in to he review. As of the beginning of chapter 49 up to chapter (??) I have started reading again and found the author does the slow pace of the story well, but interactions could be better (or I just have high standards), writing quality is reading so its a 5, SoU is a 5 b/c there are already chapters for me to read, story development, as I said feels slow, but I wasn't getting into this novel thinking it was going to be on par with my top novels, and even if not on par, story development is still really good so 5, and the slowness doesn't bother me at all, after I started reading again I felt that the character design started improving so good job for that author you get another 5, and world background, can't really make anything of it as of yet so still 3 star. I last review I felt was too harsh, this is the kind of review I would regularly give, keep doing good author.
this is very well written the MC is nicely thought out. the other characters don't seem as good you me though. great work though REALLY eager to read more of this!
MC is a God's son. His Guardian knows this, yet she's stomping all over him, and he lets her! Yeah, he's only just born, but my goodness! after I was done with my 15 mins for a free FP I quit! Horrible!
Author I hope you read this. My true rating is 4.4 but I saw your pitiful overall rating so i decided to improve it a little. It is a good dungeon novel but not enough to be on the top. I think your fighting scene is too long and sometimes you took atleast 10 chapters for just a mini boss fight to conclude. One more thing, I don't particularly like your dungeon set up, it's chaotic and there is no order and logical reasoning on it, Like glaze to forest to interior of the caste? to interior of the castle? to an Ice cavern? last one, your dungeon is already in the cold environment and then the theme of your dungeon is still cold. And I know that Niflheim is on the title but dude, make it warmer. Imagine, you can find a warm place in the coldest place/continent which is the dungeon. It will lure more adventurer for its uniquenes, relative to the environment. If you know Danmachi you can get my point. Remember, a dungeon novel is a sandbox novel, so make a world. Good Luck. I'am writing and giving reviews so I can improve my english. So pls rate my english.
Great writing overall, with a good dosage of fighting, romance and fun. Great characters and a nice World. I really like the smart mix of clichés and unique characteristics. All character feel organic. Thanks !
Author here giving a slightly biased review to help get the ball rolling as well as clarifying a few details. 1) Since English is my first language the grammar and quality of writing is more than readable however, I will make mistakes so please point them out, always appreciate grammar catchers 😁 2) Regarding the issues with the MC I'd like to clarify that regardless of his intelligent or how old his body portrays him to be, he is still a new born. His personality hasn't had a chance to develop and all his emotions are new. He's similar to a child, innocent, curious and prone to exaggerated emotions i.e. may be similar to those cliché Japanese protagonists however that is only in the beginning. 3) Many people have stopped reading the novel, both on web novel and royal road after the first few chapters mainly due to the MC and FMC quirks and they leave comments detailing as such. I would like if you could give the novel a chance, read at least the first dozen or so chapters before casting judgement as the quirks of the MC are rounded off as he develops (less cheesy). If after that you still don't find it to your taste, fair enough. For the story itself I feel that it's well built, with rich character progression and a diverse world. The story although called Dungeon of Niflheim is not solely about dungeons. It follows the dungeon core itself and his adventures within the world of Nova. There will be dungeon building and dungeon battle elements but they won't really shine until later in the story.