/ Anime & Comics / Dragon BAll- Hermit Shen[A Human Story]
摘要
— A avid Dragon Ball fan reincarnates as Master Shen; The old rival of Master Roshi... Follow along to know how the story will differ as a new soul takes over the future master of Tien Shinhan.
Tien Shinhan:- Master shen has really shown us the true path of human martial arts.
Grandpa Gohan:- You have shown me a new light.
Master Roshi:- alas i have to agree. Without you, we would have never known our true strength......
Namu:- I could never pay you back for your generosity, master!
Frieza:- This new force is rather interesting!!!.
Supreme kai:- Who could have thought this small planet could develop to such level?!!
—The Rise of the forgotten Crane School is now Imminent.
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—I will be posting this story on different sites including RoyalRoad.com...
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Here is a quick review of the fic till chapter 19 pros- Good character development, ok story pacing, ok grammar. cons-poor update stability,a bit rushed and lack of explanation and different POVs. nothing much has happened till now so there isn't much else to say. suggestion- POV of the disciples and their training of unique fighting styles would be nice,be ware of increasing the power level of the too much if you don't want an OP MC story else you would needlessly have to raise the power level of the enemy and that never ends well for the story
Great story so far I’m at chapter 12. I like the use of characters most forget about. Please continue this great story!
I love this fanfic so far, the writing quality is ok, the story is really interesting. i would love see more.
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Writing can improve a little.................................................................................................................
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currently the novel is going great and has an interesting premises not that their are not any human dbz stories but this has a refreshing take on it . such as MC being master shen who is already expirence in martial arts and is an old man , hope it continues like this in the future