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摘要
BANG!
With that one sound, the life of Keita Kuro was over. But it was not the end. By the help of a beautiful and omnipotent goddess, he was given a second chance in another world.
What will he find in this new life, teeming with surprises that only legends once held?
(Credit to Sleepwrite for the great cover)
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As much as i´d like to read this story it gets rather difficult to continue, at least for me. The setting itself is nothing new, with the usual beastkin, magic, and so on. Of course there is nothing at all wrong with that setting. My main issue with the story is the flow of the plot in general. The setup isn't ideal, but the main issue is the pacing of various event that unfolds in the story. To put it simply, it's way too fast. For instance it takes Keita somewhat along 5 lines to fight the "strongest royal knight" and win with some previously completely unmentioned power from a deceased(?) vampire. For now i'm going to pause reading the story, and i sincerely hope that the author considers slowing down the story.
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Dude love it.. But it's too fast.Slow down a little your arguements and moral quandaries last all of a paragraph stop it stretch it out give them real character not shallow shadows of real emotion 2
Very good progression with the story with a stable amount of updates. As someone who is very critical about what they read i would have to say that this story is very well structured and would recommend to others.
This story is one of the better online stories I've read and the writer puts so much into developing characters and plot. Characters really show up in the story and integrate quite quickly into the plot. Writing at times can be a little bit underdeveloped but otherwise, this is a great story.
So, I've been writing this for a good few weeks now and I've come to realise one thing. I personally think that I've come a long way since I first started planning the story a year ago, I've made many edits to the original and extended on my character development so far, even on little characters like Erika. Even so, I feel like I could still do much better. I've realised that I'm not going to improve unless I get feedback from the ones who are reading right now. Please be honest with your feedback, otherwise I won't be able to improve my writing at all. All I really ask is that you enjoy the story, and help me improve my writing skills.
Wow, I'm only just beginning, but Keitas character truly captures the hardships of many adolescents today. Its deep! Compelling! And a b9ok you just won't want to put down!