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Demon's love

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作者: GinisGod

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My name is Sonetakaru a demon and human hybrid I'm kind of an outgoing guy and this is my story of how I fall in live with a beautiful girl named Sowari in Tokyo March 8th, 2032. This girl gave me a certain look and it gave me a weird feeling and she made it hard nit to look down! This story will hsve battles, dates, and much more. So get your popcorn and get your drinks for the story that is about to unfold, The story of how my life will never, ever be the same!

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Slightly more readable than the authors last work...nevermind, a big improvement on the last work in terms of readability. However, lots of details seem to be left out and the Japanese(I think) terms for their attacks and what make it somewhat confusing to describe what they are doing. Perhaps leave an explanation on names as a part of the author's note? Interesting to see his take on romance and action, while the romantic aspects are slightly lacking. I feel that the demons, grim reapers, and the other world building stuff should be explained a bit more as the story goes on. Lots of grammar errors, but I can see the capital letter spam is gone. Kinda. Try running your book through grammarly or even spell check. I don't mind slang, but the sheer amount of typos are no good. Certainly, the story had just begun when I wrote this review, so there is potential. Anyways, keep up the good work, author. >3</

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