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Author's note: There are bloody scenes, brutality and torture in the story. There are also mysteries that will gradually be revealed for mystery lovers. I warn in advance that those with weak hearts may tremble after reading it.
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In my childhood, I grew up enduring hardships thanks to the love of my stepfather. No one in my clan liked me. To them, I was nothing but useless garbage.
At that time, I thought my sufferings were too great. Now that I think about it, those troubles were actually as insignificant as a grain of sand in a huge desert. It was thanks to the events that began with my learning that I was a Chosen after I left my clan.
Who had chosen me? What did it mean to be chosen? What was I chosen for? I didn't know that back then. All I knew was the existence of the book in my soul, which taught me more about it as I got stronger and there were other chosen ones besides me. If I could go back in time, would I do the things I did again? Would I be naive enough to make that bloody decision again? Could I have guessed that the truth was so cruel?
In a world full of mysteries where the law of the jungle reigns, the great and colossal journey of someone who people wouldn't even call garbage.
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As the first novel I wrote, it will always have a special place in my heart. If you want to travel in a world full of mystery, action, war and development with a leading role that you will love and adopt, you are in the right place.
The story seems promising and It really has potential. One thing I would suggest is you could use 'he' instead of Asil in all the lines. Otherwise, it's totally fine and I look forward to reading new chapters and storyline...[img=update][img=recommend]
You can tell there is a great attempt at trying to build up a deep story in here. There is a lot of focus on lore and the backstory of the characters to make them all seem more real and establish a connection with the reader. The big problem, is that the way the story is being told needs a lot more polishment. There is a lot of repeated words such as "the man opened the door, then he walked through the door, then proceeded to close the door..." over the chapters, when saying things like "the door was opened and he proceeded to walk through it" would have had the same effect. The dialogue also needs some work with everyone talking with too many info dumps to address who they are, where they come from, how they feel, and why they do what they do. It's simply too much information transmitted in a very unnatural way. People will say things like "I know why you think this way, you think this way because this happened and this happened, causing you to do this and that". It's just so weird hearing someone explain to them why they are the way they are. Narration also suffers from that, with any time a new character is introduced we receive more exposition and more info dumps about their backstory before we even get to know them. The story seems fine overall, but the writing quality needs a bit of work. I'm sure more practice and study will help make the author's passion be delivered in the best way possible in the future.
Her seferinde ayıla bayıla okuyoruz Orkun'cuğum, bu da bizim iflâh olmaz Nirvana enayiliğimiz işte. Eline emeğine sağlık balım. Takipteyim.
It's one of the most enjoyable books I've ever read. It's an immersive and intriguing story, and I hope there'll be more. I wish the author all the best.
I am also a first-time novelist and I must commend the way the action started in the novel without needless narration. Your writing style is unique. I'm still reading so I can't say much for now. I hope it continues to wow me
Eline emeğine sağlık Orkun'cuğum. Çeviri için teşekkürler, zevkle okudum. Takipteyim.✨ Çeviri bittikten sonraki planın ne bu arada merak ettim.
The author's grammar was splendid. The first-person narration was so immersive that made me have a deep dive into the story. This is action packed! Literally every chapter bringing up a creature and our characters fighting them, and I have to say that these sequences are pretty well written. I could see the things happening as I was reading it. The world building in this novel is really good. Dialogues are also well written and also funny in places making it very much entertaining. All in all, A splendid job of a novel. I am looking forward to the upcoming chapters.
Often times it would be difficult to judge a cultivation story when there are only a few chapters posted. But the relationship between the protagonist and his father is somewhat unique to the take because often times it is a solo ride for the protagonist until later on. Since this is the first novel the Author wrote, there are more obvious mistakes. But all of it can be fixed and hopefully author will improve as more chapters are posted. An example is the use of "quotation marks". (You should be more careful where to place it.) The plot development is still little but it is there and I can see potential in it. Characters are also on the way to develop into something nice so it is something to look forward. All in all, it was a good quick read. Hopefully there are more in the future
An absolute hidden gem! The plot is real interesting but it's the backstory and the world development that really pulled me in. The MC also goes through a lot of character development. If I really had to nit-pick and point-out a downside, that would just be the writing quality at the beginning chapters. However, the author took care of it too after a few chapters. Higly recommend this masterpiece and truly hope the author sees this novel to the end.
Great story....has a lot of potential... the author has the ability to make emotions appear via words...............................Don't stop writing this novel
I think it's a good story. I think everyone wants to give. You won't regret it. Even if there are shortcomings, do not pass without reading [img=coins][img=coins]
If you are familiar with and love the genre, don't miss it. I am sure you will read all the chapters published in one breath. You ignore my giving full marks as I am a writer from the same country :)
Beautiful prose, interesting plot, and a great character list. For all you new readers, do not miss such an engaging story, and don't worry, chapters will keep flowing in!
It's great I mean it is literally awesome. One of the best novel I have read also I have read only few so from my pov it is great. Keep up the great work
The story started out interesting. I think it will become more interesting as it progresses. The descriptions are not long and exaggerated as we are used to in other series. For now, I think it's a promising series worth reading.
I have no words to appreciate your content. How beautifully you join different concepts under one novel! So many things to enjoy and learn. Highly recommended!
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This is your first work, right? If I'm not mistaken. So I humbly leaving an honest review. The story is interesting from the start and the characters are fine. Hmm the only problem is the book cover, and the other few mistakes about grammar.
Since it is the author's first work, I started reading it without much expectation. However, the novel managed to attract me even with a few chapters. Although there are few chapters at the moment, I think it has the potential to reach high places. As someone who has read many different novels on many different sites before, I think that in a short time, even this review I wrote will become popular enough to get a lot of appreciation. I hope the author continues to write in this way and improves himself and we get a very nice hidden gem.