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Lucian, a big fan of anime and manga, was hit by a truck while walking across a road after going to the shop. When he woke up, he was in a forest with dead bodies all around him. To his right was a crying baby boy, and an old man was walking towards them both.
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Always wanted a ff about this manga and please dont disappoint MC and Shins “parents” by making this a harem. And if you do decide to do harem atleast put down a warning comment here before I or any other reader get invested
Summary: Watch the anime or read the manga, it's better than reading this, nothing changes anyway so it doesn't matter.
it's good it has proper build up and some twist which is great and it has proper dialogue good pacing and of course a likeable MC but i hope he doesn't go after Sicily but with maria as his lover. It also have good grammar and it's not confusing to read which in some fanfic cases are
In the first place, your story is the same as the original and your mc has no relevance since he only copies and chases the original protagonist everywhere. stop showing shin and we all know his story and we don't care and stop acting like the main character his reactions are stupid and childish for an adult man or with some neurons I like harems but I know it's hard to write one that doesn't look like cheap raunchy fantasy so good choice with just one partner In short, I appreciate the potential of your work, so I will give you 5 stars until you have more chapters.
i just realize another the most taboo thing when writing fanfic that is copy the protagonis character. yeah, this fanfic MC copy shin character, the beginning of chapter is when you build MC character, but author just copy shin character, even their reaction is the same.. and honestly MC magic is TRASH! there is no creativity, author just use normal magic that just so boring, when MC can fuse his elemental magic..
It's just a copy of the original. The only thing the author changed is 'Shin said' to 'Shin and Lucien said.' Other than that it's basically a copy of the original, only with worse grammar...
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just no. quality: 1 nothing to say just 1. development: 1 its the exact same as the anime. not 1 thing has changed even slightly. character: 0 if possible the mc is just a copy of shin, but with no thoughts of his own. he just copies everything shin says and we don't see him with any form of sentience he's like a lifeless object, just there to make a fanfic. updates: 1 nothing to say. background: 1 nothing to say.
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Well, as always I would mention that my star rating is not what I would rate the story as the star rating is not judging what I would like too. So, here's what I thought after reaching the Maria and sicily chapter. This story is, in polite term, plain. Basically no difference from Canon apart from extra name on the dialogue due to him and his twin shin keep talking in the same dialogue like some b rate movie. MC is the dude who got into isekai of isekai world, 1 stage higher than Shin(Because he knows the plot. This is important as we know it.). Yet mc act like Shin, idiotic + naive + etc. I'm not saying he's bad mc, just in perspective of ff reader, he is no difference from shin. In fact if you delete Lucian dialogue, the story is just Canon story. I don't expect a big change, I just want to see mc develop as his own character which this Lucian is not(So many people in comment saying Lucian is same as shin and they are right.). I think it's because you didn't develop Lucian as character and instead just skip skip skip the progress. Now in the Canon, this can be done because it's shin manga, he's the protag. But in ff, you can't do it without making everyone side character because you need to make mc pop out and smooth out his progress as mc. Instead, you make his presence feels like other character, which you can saw how he is no difference from shin. It just can't work since he is mc and you even give him a far better cheat. I wish to talk more about mc but I don't want to make you feel uncomfortable anymore than this so I'm gonna quit here. Anyway, good luck with your fanfic mate, I hope you will have a steady fan base. Its not my cup of tea but it may be for others. Good luck and good day. P. S:To reader who read my review, please read the story first. Who knows, it may turn into a treasure for you.
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Trash, little to no originality. This story is just cannon with extra steps. The mc knows of the plot and everything but acts like he knows nothing that or even the author forgot that the mc knows. Literal garbage I would recommend reading the manga or watching the anime instead of reading this since this is basicaly cannon with an extra extra
Yo Author. I saw that there are lots of problems with the plot, especially the MC, the twin of Shin. I recommend you to read : Twin Slime(New) by Fallen_Michael His novel might help you. I hope it will help.
Pity it wont be a harem. Your story would be alot better. Not that I am gonna read it though since apparently you don’t know how to write a story it seems. Well good luck and hopefully you can get better at writing. Reviews are def not on your side ahahah. Try not to copy the orginal story and follow mc around like a dog
The chapter is a bit short. But it's very fun and I want to read more. cheer up 💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪💪
This has a lot of potential and is very much worth 5 stars. I hope for more chapters soon.👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍👍
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disappointment Mc has zero effects on the story Shin still acts the same despite having someone to talk his age and still the same boring character he was And look at that our mc who was complete copy of shin just became a crazed murderer in one night how freakin perfect Same boy who was stunned still when seeing girl his age felt nothing while he killed dozens of people in a night really author despite all those comments saying his behavior was unrealistic you still wrote this "thing" (ı dont even know what to say)
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