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In the bottomless darkness, in the middle there is a light that is getting bigger and will devour the darkness.
When the light was about to devour the darkness, there was a male voice asking for help.
“Please, Save this world”
The light instantly devours the darkness.
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bio makes no sense so far very little focus on mc almost no development for him to story's pretty much the same so much pov on everyone else with oc chipping in here and there and some times it feels like the auther is skipping the oc conversations to focus on Ichigo if I wanted that I'd just go read bleach just not my cup of tea
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I just want to know author if you have ever read any novel or fic that is good, because frankly this s+--t it killing my brain cells. there's no explanation about the back round of the MC, how he acquired his living expenses, how he got his hands on martial arts manual, HOW THE F**""*K HE KNOW ABOUT SPIRITUEL ENERGY AND HOW TO OPERATE IT, AND...... there many more but I don't want to mention it, let's leave it at this point. Author, you need to take example of your predecessors and practice more if you want to be successful. good luck.
this needs heavy editing to be written in english. the premise and character building is great in some areas, but lukewarm in many others. I won't be reading anymore, however I think I'll hover over this story to see if things change
dont waste your time reading this dog 💩 the writer (so trash at writing I refuse to call them an author) has called a ff it's just bleach with an added in secondary character I would say second mc but the writer spends most of the time rewriting cannon tenten from naruto has more screen time the our supposed mc
It's basically bleach with a new secondary character, the story doesn't change anything, mc is strong but is secondary in the story and also has no impact on the story. (Google translate)
Your face must look like a monkey and your brain must look like a chimpanzee. You're a false Saiyan that acts like Monkey King Sun Wukong only to become Sus Wuwuwugang who can't even turn into a Super Saiyan. The sandevistan you bought was straight up a fake and made your reaction time as slow as a sloth. IDK. Just Saiyan.
Полное повторение канона, Лучше посмотреть аниме Full repetition of the canon, Better to watch the anime (Если ты это читаешь то ты лох)......................................................
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You need to add more of the Mc just some constructive criticism and I'm not reading this again it was a disappointment
author if there will be romance please don't make female lead from bleach make the female lead "Dan ah-an" from GoH. you could say the the mc is the original jin mori that went to investigate a strange energy but when he got there he was pulled to his first life you wrote of with no memories and now in bleach later Dan ah-an will be pulled to the world of bleach as well after mc remembers everything.
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Hm. Seems like I am reading a fanfiction from Wattpad. Dunno about this, but the characters feel bland and emotionless. You need to work on your writing skills too. This was somewhat a good read, but this definitely isn't my cup of tea.
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is this good? I don't like harem fics but I like the monkey king idea so is it a small harem and does it take over the story? .
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Low-key hella good and has loads of potential if it gets updated regularly and doesn’t get dropped
FF com muito potencial, sou literalmente fanboy do jin mori e de bleach. PLS NÃO DROP
what is the point of having the blurb about the mc when the story isn't even about him only had one chapter about him the the rest is on everyone else and the story is still cannon -little to no character development -little to no world building -updates slow for what feels like a copy and paste with little to no story change currently on ch12 of making this