摘要
We join our hero Jeager a barbarian nicknamed the hound o' the wood for his skills in navigating the monster filled forest his tribe calls home which along with his dual identities as both the leader of the village's warriors and the chieftains son gained him some fame with the Zuran empire's slave masters for their gladiator pits . It is Jeager's objective to escape and start a tribe of his own making friends and lovers across the world on his journey
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2評論
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- 世界背景
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寫檢討
The story definitely has good possibilities but unfortunately there are some issues regarding readability. There is a bit of rushing in regards to the progression of the story with it kinda feeling like the author is maybe running to the part they are most excited about. Another issue is what I guess would be formatting. There are parts of the story where there are not breaks in the dialogue so it turns into a giant run-on paragraph that can change character perspectives with no reason and little use of “ to determine speaking. Overall if the author maybe gets some one to do some light editing it could actually get pretty solid. Unfortunately as it stands it’s just pretty hard to read.
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