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How he got there, the memory of his death a blur but despite that was glad to be in the Danmachi world the only thing left for him was to rise, go on adventures and experience his new life.
This is my first fanfic a Danmachi FIC (chapters are rough but I improve) with a harem of 3 that's been decided.
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I think this fanfic is little bit different from the general webnovel fanfics. The relationship between the MC and the other charachters are actually good and well written except from Freya. We know Freya is cracked in the head but the history between Freya and alchemy could be revealed a bit more without losing the mystery element, that way we readers can understand Freya's actions. Grammar is decent although there are some missing words, it is passable. This fanfic actually used mystery element quite well and it makes readers curious about the history of this world (I know this is Danmachi fanfiction but the world is altered a bit).
In this review I will sum up what you should expect in this fan fiction. I gave myself 4.2 starts instead of five because there are things I still have to improve. First this is a harem story with 5 love interests which have already been decided. 1. Artemis 2. Hephaestus 3. Rose Fannett 4. Ryuu Lion 5. Riveria Ljos Alf Grammar: It took a while for me but I was able to improve my writing as the story went on you cal look at the highlighted reviews as proof you'll some mistakes here and there but it doesn't put you away from the immersion. Story: The story is a bit fast-paced but I aim to slow it down a little to improve on the world in the next volume along with the history of alchemy in danmachi. Character: I took the time to write good relationships between the MC and the other characters everyone has some time in the story for themselves, Freya too though I don't like her character I will make her better in the next volume. Update stability: I gave myself 4 stars I'm now aiming to release 3 times a week on Monday Tuesday and Friday maybe some surprise extra chapters when I have the time to write.
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Grammer mistakes and sentences that make zero sense. Follows typical path of the original. MC contradicts himself and made me drop when he tried to awkwardly tried to guess Ryu's personality. I literally closed it and just decided to forget ever reading such cringe. secondly, the fight with ottar as level 1 and diving in dungeon just after arriving in the world makes zero sense. The MC knows danmachi but still goes to hostess of fertility. He also should know that he can't lie to gods. The premise would have been 100 times better if his alchemy was unique. The author also gives no reason and keeps foreshadowing something about alchemy that also doesn't make sense in such a fast paced novel. Worldbg also doesn't makes sense since nothing about alchemy and it's stigma. Why should Hephaestus have anything to do with alchemy and what is the correlation between her eye patch and his alchemy? Read at your own risk and sanity.
Cheap drama all time 1 Star ..............................................................................................................................................
Read till Chapter 6. Writing Quality - 5/5 - Good writing quality. Story Development - 4/5 - Has quite a striking similarity to the FF 'My upgrades are invincible'. Yet, this story is not a cheap knock-off but using similar storyline in a slightly different manner. Good job, if Author is going to make it multiverse story, please do not make it similar to the aforementioned FF (i.e. Lord of the rings, Demon Slayer, Harry Potter, etc.) rather go in Anime route, let him go to FMA universe or something 😅 (Just suggestion, nothing else). Character Design - 5/5 - Pretty stable design I guess, too soon to comment on this. Updating Stability - 3/5 - ??? (Will change this to 5/5 only when constant updates happen and number of chapter exceeds 30) World Background - 5/5 - Now here, Author has made it very different from the aforementioned FF with introduction of Alchemists and some guild for them in Danmachi. Hope this FF continues, great work author!!👍🙏
Great fic. I like it so far. Also, the harem selection is very interesting as well. If I would change anything, it would probably be adding a little more action, but other than that I really like the story.
Not gonna lie im bad at this so ill just say good job i like this alot and hope for its prosperity[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
in all honesty it's a really good fanfic and I have probably have reread it about 7 times because it just that good hope you keep updating it.
very good story one of the actual ones that keep my attention love the alchemist theme I rarely see any isaki people doing stuff like this and you actually made it good as well this story is amazing
G lue 50 chap et c pas pour pour moi même si généralement j'aime ce genre de truc La ça me dérange comment le harem ce construit , les relation comment le MC devient le MC à la place de Bell je veux dire on dirait que tu essaye de montre à quel point Bell est nul je comprend que tu ait peur qu'il volent les femmes de ton MC après tout Bell est protagoniste de harem
Well, i'm loving the ff, and I'm just in the beginning. Author-san if you have discord create a group to the readers give ideas. I have a lot of ideas, but I want to give in a private chat. You can notify when you send a new chapter too.
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establish a chapter delivery time you are not in the ranking that is why, when the power stones are restored you have to put a minimum chapter ranking from 1 to 10 you should be, release more chapters if you want short ones per day or long once a week , una buena historia que puedan ver , para aquellos que lean se puede traducir cualquier cosa por el Chrome para ver cualquier capítulo de cualquier idioma
maybe adding some of your original event in this fanfiction I am the exp of my Holy Scripture Review. Webnovel is my body, exp is my blood. I have created over a thousand useless reviews. Unknown to sleep, nor known to reality. I have withstood Cliff-Kun to create many reviews. Yet, these hands will never hold anything. So, as I pray ... Unlimited Exp Works!
Brilliant can not awat for more the story is getting better and better with each chapter
its alright but not for me the author just zooms by in the story. it would be a better story if the author just slowed down a little took his time and let us explore a little.